Beautiful Building

  

Echoes of forgiveness penetrate

Steel walls

Only to escape

By breaking windows.

Now the shattered glass

Remains not cleaned up

To serve as defense mechanism

In keeping onlookers at a distance.

Then no one can see that

Even though this structure looks strong

It has one big weakness…

 

                  Still feeling hollow

                  Feeling like anyone who enters

                  Is merely a visitor,

                  Fearing being vandalized and

                  Abandoned.

 

The hate of being rented grows every day

But still can’t bear the thought of being sold.

Wishing the foundation was built on softer ground

So the next time the earthquakes

It could find itself on new property.

Such a beautiful building is already condemned

Even though it is in perfect structure.

 

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a profound depth flowing through your words that echoes buildings and lives as well... that hollow feeling that makes one seem so empty... You've created a piece here that speaks so beautifully on several levels, to our current economic times and the emotional influence of isolation in the world. Amazing write.

[Flo]

nicely and creatively written, got me inspired, I loved it! :D
-Flo

[Georgia Gypsy]

I am trying to decipher if this is truely about a building or about human feelings, or both.
It speaks volumes to me of broken hearts and soul, with wishing to be on new property at the next earthquake....
Very intellectually deep.
Great job!

[Wildfleour]

A sense a metaphor here, Cowboy.

A very interesting piece.