A Day Like No Other

  

As I watched the sun begin to set down

Into the ocean, scarlet red upon reflection,

An euphoric scent rode in

On an off shore breeze

Like a surfer catching the perfect wave.

It was far too sweet to be jasmine,

And much too delicate to be from a rose…

         I knew is it was a sign

That this was to be a day like no other;

Then out of the blue

                  You appeared.

Walking along the shoreline,

Watching the sun cascade off your curves

The moment was more magical

         Then if a mermaid would’ve appeared.

For so long you have been my hope for humanity

                           Faith in friendship

                           Belief in being myself

Now standing before, staring into…

Sincere eyes, I know I can believe in things

         I don’t see.

As I watch your soft lips

         While you speak to me of life, love and memories

I can feel compassion seeping into my skin,

Suddenly I feel beauty from within.

Gracing me with one day in your presence

Was the greatest gift beyond anything material.

For though we are back to messages in a bottle

That day was more valuable then any

Sunken treasure that could be discovered

beneath the ocean.

Reviews

[Stephanie]

Beautiful..... no other way to describe it! It just exuded sweetness and a sort of romance. Amazing imagery, too. I think my favorite lines were:

"For though we are back to messages in a bottle
That day was more valuable then any
Sunken treasure that could be discovered
beneath the ocean."

Gorgeous!

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

gorgeous. the wording is perfect, i felt like i was standing next to you on that beach and seeing the beautiful vision you are seeing, smelling the wonderfully scented air. excellent descriptions, beautiful imagery. another amazing write. you never cease to amaze me.

[Brianna Brie]

Now standing before, staring into�
Sincere eyes, I know I can believe in things
I don't see.
As I watch your soft lips
While you speak to me of life, love and memories
I can feel compassion seeping into my skin,
Suddenly I feel beauty from within.
Gracing me with one day in your presence
Was the greatest gift beyond anything material.
For though we are back to messages in a bottle
That day was more valuable then any
Sunken treasure that could be discovered
beneath the ocean.

I love that it told of a story. It has depth of soul and character. Nicely done!

[Sean Allen]

You are standing on the beach, your senses are enhanced in anticipation of who knows what and then your lover appears once again to remind you of what it was that made you lover her in the first place.
Sort of reminded me of South Pacific and 10 combined, but I compare everything to movies!

[An owl on the moon]

This is such a beautiful, flowing write, filled with the mystery of romance. This day is like no other, and you capture that sense so very well. Such a lifting, moving write!

[Bud]

Astonishing write, Dale! This has such a soothing, comforting emotion within. Absolutely Beautiful poem!

"For so long you have been my hope for humanity
Faith in friendship
Belief in being myself"

This stood out the most, for me. I think it is the foundation that holds up the whole piece. The core that the rest is built around. The vision that is being held.
Stunning imagery! Magnificent piece, Masterfully written!

[QuietPoet]

This was beautiful. I could see it as if it was a movie. You did a great job with imagery. It was truly romantic!

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Astonishing and really profound! I really had a sense of sharing such a moment and can relate to this feeling. It is so nice when you have that .. not feeling judged.. beautiful and open! The image of this other is very inspiring.. it made my heart feel really warm.. thank you so much for sharing! =)

[Valerie Dean Belew]

Either this is romantic poetry, or you are talking to a supernatural being. Very well written, but the exact meaning is uncertain. I read it twice. Sometimes good poetry allows us to create our own personal meaning. I did enjoy this work.

[octane143]

So beautiful and romantic! The imagery is amazing but the depth and the emotions is what makes it spectacular!