A Day Like No Other

  

As I watched the sun begin to set down

Into the ocean, scarlet red upon reflection,

An euphoric scent rode in

On an off shore breeze

Like a surfer catching the perfect wave.

It was far too sweet to be jasmine,

And much too delicate to be from a rose…

         I knew is it was a sign

That this was to be a day like no other;

Then out of the blue

                  You appeared.

Walking along the shoreline,

Watching the sun cascade off your curves

The moment was more magical

         Then if a mermaid would’ve appeared.

For so long you have been my hope for humanity

                           Faith in friendship

                           Belief in being myself

Now standing before, staring into…

Sincere eyes, I know I can believe in things

         I don’t see.

As I watch your soft lips

         While you speak to me of life, love and memories

I can feel compassion seeping into my skin,

Suddenly I feel beauty from within.

Gracing me with one day in your presence

Was the greatest gift beyond anything material.

For though we are back to messages in a bottle

That day was more valuable then any

Sunken treasure that could be discovered

beneath the ocean.

Reviews

[Stephanie]

Beautiful..... no other way to describe it! It just exuded sweetness and a sort of romance. Amazing imagery, too. I think my favorite lines were:

"For though we are back to messages in a bottle
That day was more valuable then any
Sunken treasure that could be discovered
beneath the ocean."

Gorgeous!

[cest la vie]

What an absolutely beautiful poem. The words just flowed, like that wave that brought your love to shore.
"I can feel compassion seeping into my skin,"
such a strong and meaningful line.. This is very, very nicely done. I love the scriot, gives it that sensuous, loving feel.
Lynne

[Helen Woodward]

Beautifully crafted Dale, a few grammar issues (easily fixed) But overall something I would like to experience with someone...some day.
Thank you :-)

(Then/than)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Absolutely beautiful Dale. I loved the imagrey of the ocean and the woman, and her being a treasure. I know you will treasure your woman Dale. You have a heart of gold.

[Ellen Hammond]

A lovely, flowing, enchanting write. It is very visual yet I find it somewhat ambiguous, as it could be a love poem, or an inspiring, spiritual one. It allows readers freedom to interpret for themselves. Very nicely penned.

[Chaos Stone]

great write, very romantic, rife with metaphor
i wish i could have a day like that. i think we all do

[Norma J. Jessee]

So beautiful Dale, I can almost hear and smell the ocean as I read this.I have often wondered at the glorious treasures that surely must lie beneath the water. Thousands of years worth. What would we find if we could just wade into the water and explore even the greatest delphs ? Perhaps that is one of the lures of the mighty ocean, our wondering of all the treasure therein. Your poetry brings such wonderful thoughts to mind. You have indeed described a day like no other.

Another gem for my favorites

[Erotic Goddess]

As I watch your soft lips

While you speak to me of life, love and memories

I can feel compassion seeping into my skin,

Suddenly I feel beauty from within.

This was beautiful Dale!!!! Such emotion so well done. Thank you for sharing dear friend...

[A]

Great poem! You described the imagery very well. :)

[Ladysue]

Beautiful, romantic, serene, charming and eloquently written. A dreamy piece of writing with a wonderful glowing flow. A pleasure to read!

[Stacey Watts]

Absolutely stunning piece. Everything about it was dreamy and seemed very soft and romantic. The imagery was completely stunning. Excellent job.