I Thou Sacrifice

                                            

Under this relentless red sky

I shall endure

To bring color to your barren soul.

For there is no greater deed

Then to know that my parchment

Means new life

To your thirsty emotions.

You can drain me of my strength

Yet I shall never become your weakness.

Wrap my stem around your heart,

I promise that my thorns

Shall only make you bleed

What thy needs…

The sins of yesterday,

The mistakes of tomorrow.

For to be the rose

That keeps thy desires from wilting

I thou sacrifice.

 

 

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Damn Dale, you are getting better and better. i love this poem, absolutely love it. so sincere, so romantic and passionate, and like a bryan adams song, "everything i do i do it for you." The metaphors in this piece are off the chain, and they all work well together, and end with the analogy of a rose, and instead of a cliche of talking about a woman being the rose, YOU are the rose. nice touch. thanks for sharing.
your fan

[Masq]

Simply beautiful.....very well written and wonderfully expressed. The picture really added to the overall appeal of this piece. Kudos to you!

[Ladysue]

OMG Dale, this was incredible. I mean this was really really a great piece of poetry. so beautiful, romantic and very eloquently said! I love how you did this..Perfection my friend!

[Erotic Goddess]

Wow. This was really good. I enjoyed reading this piece. You have such a great tone in this piece, the language was perfect and I think that you said everything perfectly. Great job Dale...

xxoxx

[Laura Sparkle]

Delicate and careful. Sounds like the devotion of a slave-lover. Helpless and hopeless yet always entrapped in his/her master's being.

[Winter McPherson]

Really beautiful! I had to read it twice to get the full impact. Such a promise to live for another......
The picture is awesome too! Great piece!

[Kelz]

A beautfiul poem:)

[Anita B Jacques]

Awesome, I'm speechless my dear friend. "Under this relentless red sky I shall endure To bring color to your barren Soul. It sings to my ears. The life of a Red Rose. Thank you for sharing your talent with us my friend
God Bless you.

[barricade]

Whoa! outstanding work my friend!!! such a fine piece of writing...flawless...!

"You can drain me of my strength
Yet I shall never become your weakness."

these lines so beautiful and so powerful...emotions and feelings flow effortlessly...you've grown as a writer...getting better and better with each piece you write...this one is definitely one of my favorites...leaves me in awe...

kudos to you my friend!!!
a pleasure to read...thanks for sharing......

regards
barricade...

[jen]

this is lovely mister cowboy... it seems like in healing with such selfless love, that some amount of healing will be received as well? truly, that is what this is about, love that doesn't judge, harbor ill feelings or put forth demands... simply by giving because it is needed...
this one really seems about healing and is so well done... thank you for posting it

[Anna]

Very pretty. "You can drain me of my strength, Yet I shall never become your weakness." I especially like that line, and all of them, really :)