Epitaph

  

Mechanical rhythm…

 

Once connected heartbeat

Now out of synch

With the spirit

It has given life to.

 

Under the gun…

 

Letting the trigger

Do the talking

Taking a bullet

To stop the bleeding.

 

Out on the run…

 

Painting the town

With any color

Not already drained

Through lonely wounds.

 

Now I will write

My own epitath

While I still have time.

 

Here lies a man

Cursed by three little words.

They were his disease

They were his cure

They were what he lived for

They were the reason he died.

 

 

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. great emotions placed into this coming from your heart.. with deep flow and intensity dropping at the point of the doom of 3 words and where it can take us.. what I like about this is I believe this can touch many as the three words can be a variety of things such as I Love You.. I hate you.. Please marry me.. Please leave me.. and so on..with an unhappy ending... it represents 3 words that can break a person coming from someone close usually.. that hurt intensely from just those words and unhappy ending. The metaphor truly is endless... could even be words from a publisher saying You can't write.. or and other dream shattered by words as well if you really read further into it.. this should touch a large audience of people... great insight with a sad note... thank you for sharing.. I hope things get better.. great work! =)

[N]

This poem was chilling. I have a feeling that I know what those three little words were.
The whole poem was very powerfully, and beautifully written.
Very nice; I really liked this.

[shythatway]

Now I'm a little puzzled. I'm not so sure those three little words are what I first believed them to be. But I really liked the first part of this, you described a very unsettling feeling. =/ Thank you for sharing.

[Katchzen]

Taking a bullet to stop the bleeding...

And I love the whole idea in the first stanza-type-thing.

Hm...three little words? Maybe I'm a bit slow today for not knowing which words those are. I'll figure it out.

[Wildfleour]

Your writing is multi-faceted and moving, my friend.

[Melon Choly]

Those three little words are VERY powerful, yes, they can mean life, or death.

[Anastasia Starlena]

Wow very powerful piece so very well written.

[Sorry Infamous]

Wow this is chilling. Powerful write.