Empire To Ashes, Dust To Hope

  

Among these fiery ruins

Of this once great empire

Are the scatter ashes

Of Liberty’s written word

Caused by the price of freedom…

 

              Never to rise like the Phoenix.

 

Crushed beneath the ruble

Is the foundation of hope

And the dreams of yesteryear

All from the effect of the war

Against unattainable glory…

 

              Unable to fly with the eagles again.

 

Spiraling pride…

              Ignorant madness

       Left the mighty pillars anemic.

 

Hypocritical logic…

               Mirrored trust

       Weakened the defenses immune system.

 

All eyes are focused on

These miles of destruction

As the hearts of the world

See this as the end

While I look upon it as

 

              A beginning!!

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Whoa Cowboy.....getting deep and philosophical on us here! But, this is absolutely wonderful and you have great depth in the way you look at past civiliations, and compare the failure of nations to man rising again....could be a nation, could be one man!...a man striving to be the best, the winner, yet unattainable, until he comes out of the ashes with that new opportunity.
Out of every defeat, is a victory. A rising out of the ashes to overcome!....truly a new beginning!
Awesome write with great insight and will to survive!!!

[Katchzen]

Ooo, I like it. ^-^ Especially the end as a beginning part. Endings are always also beginnings, but so few people seem to actually realize that.

[Walkingblind]

This reminds me of when someone says that history repeats itself. I see that as
a put down, stating that all we'll ever do is act upon our great grandfather failures.
I like how you see that and except for continuing to speak about destruction you
bring to light that, those things were in the past and now it is time to make a new present
that can birth a better future. Very nice poem and full of knowledge.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

VERY WELL SAID!! And I especially love the ending. I think you're exactly right. We are in a new day! You have to destroy in order to rebuild I believe the message is, and I couldn't agree more! Great pen!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

VERY WELL SAID!! And I especially love the ending. I think you're exactly right. We are in a new day! You have to destroy in order to rebuild I believe the message is, and I couldn't agree more! Great pen!

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great emotion and imagery!! My favorite part is 'never to rise like the phoenix' I'm sure you can guess why. :P Plus, the phoenix is an amazing creature. :D

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. really a rollercoaster pouring out emotionally.. so many ways to take this one!! A crushed misled dreamer.. a person who has had a rough quest through life.. etc.. however I love the ending as it shines a true and bright light:

All eyes are focused on
These miles of destruction
As the hearts of the world
See this as the end
While I look upon it as
A beginning!!

No matter the reference or metaphor here.. it has a very uplifting ending.. a true survivor's way of looking at life and obstacles surrounding.. thank you for sharing!!! =)

[Anastasia Starlena]

Beginning, end I guess it is only which side of the fence unfrotunately you are on... Great piece very thought provoking.

[Bud]

Now, that's what I'm talking about! Optimism at it's best! No words are worthy enough to compiment you for this prophetic piece of art that you have created...Astronomically Grand! That's the best I can find at this moment to describe how I feel about this one. Your vision is 20/20 foresight...not just hindsight! Keep up the Outstanding Talent!

[Winter McPherson]

The ending surprised me. But it really had a powerful punch to it. I think a lot of Americans feel this way right now. The eagles have definitely landed! Very good piece!