Surreal Fairytale

  

Misty eyes notice a dwarf

Dancing under a purple sunrise

Like he was a princess.

The princess dressed in white

Walks down the middle of the street

Like walking down the aisle

To an everafter wedding.

Her gallant knight sells her

At the last minute for magic beans

To feed his horse in hopes

Of making him a unicorn

When all the noble steed wants

Is to be the mouse

With so many friends.

Yet the mouse sits and cries

While watching the dwarf dance

Wishing to be his partner.

 

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Dale.....I am most certain this is not just a "fairy tale", but a tale of settling for seconds...compromises..., change of roles, unmet expectations somewhere along the way! The poor mouse in the end has to sit and watch, though he wanted to be so much more! Your way of telling this fable/moral is unique, and flowing from the magic kingdom with creativity! Well done!!!

[barleygirl]

I don't know what the heck this means, but I love the uninhibited way your message keeps morphing into a different whimsical scenario over & over until it feels like a perfectly reasonable storyline (kinda like Alice in Wonderland) *smile* Fondly, Margie

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Glad you like the whimsey of the poem... I think how ever you interpret it is right... but my intent was how we tend to wish we were someone else and in turn they wish they were someone else... an endless circle of people wanting what others have.

[barleygirl]

Oh yeah, now I see it. Excellent message & point of view . . . so true!

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Wow! I find the way this is narrated extremely unique, intelligent and earnest. I think we don't look inwards often enough. It takes a long time for us to understand that we need to focus on self-actualization rather than wanting to turn into someone we're not. In a sense, this is, therefore, a very poetic description of an identity-crisis-chaos. Superbly written! It's a piece that might appear to be simple but exposes extremely complex issues relating to one's identity and how one attempts to define or re-define it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much for the feedback.

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~ you're very welcome...

[Marie]

This is surreal...magic and mystical...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you... triple threat.

[AYVID N]

We always aspire for something other than what we have, never waiting to appreciate the beauty of what we could have. This sad but a reality and so touching!
Fairy tales are not 'happily ever after'.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are so correct sweets... instead of appreciating what we have we look for what we don't eventually leaving us without and alone.

[AYVID N]

Wish good sense would prevail in time...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Amen to that :)

[†Tracey†]

Always searching..always wanting things that are so close and yet so far away.. I've been sold for magic beans one time to many lol..x

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Ruth]

Oh Dale, love :)
This is beautiful and so original :) You have a heart of gold, you know that?
I love the stance of this piece..your surreal vision of it and such yearning I feel in it also...beautiful work
xx

[SpokenWord]

Everyone always wants to be someone or something else and rarely do they realize that there are those who wish to be them. We all should be thankful for what we have and who we are because you never know what it is like to walk in another shoes and hold there secrets in life. Inspiring write my friend.

[Tina Kline]

There's a serious circling and interconnecting going on in this fairytale like poem. Everyone wanting something and not really getting it. A very clever & fun poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

The mystery of life. Few people appreciate their life and situations. I like the twist of this poem. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

This is definitely one twisted fairytale but it is a reminder that things aren't always what they seem. There may be hidden feelings and wants deep down inside of people and that life is always changing and that no fairytale is perfect. Great write my friend.