As I Lay Down To Sleep

  

A heart-stopping embrace

That makes me feel more alive

Then a near death experience.

A kiss that stops the world

Till time is nothing more

Then where I am.

Eyes like that of heaven

Showing me salvations

From loves wrong doings.

 

Those are the things

I see in the woman

Of my dreams

That I have yet to meet

As I lay me down to sleep.

 

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

When I read the title, I thought it was a prayer and I still think it is. Having such wishes should be included in the prayer. Anyway, i sense so much admiration of a man for this woman who will soon have her existence. It's wonderful to end a day with such thoughts and to sleep with a smile on the face. Nice one.

[Bud]

I see a lot of powerful emotion packed in a poetic prayer that unquestionably cuts straight to the point. The craftsmanship and word stringing skill is excellent...which is what I find this work of art to be. Excellent!

[Cherry Berry]

A man with hope in his eyes longing to be with a true love. Well penned. I loved this poem.
xox
Cherri

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

wo, how sweet. this is an excellent poem, god for you! she will come...as we all wait for that special ssomeone, i have Boo doggie so im cool! x0x0x0x0

[Melon Choly]

"A kiss that stops the world"

Where nothing else matters, only that very moment, only the two of you exist, nice nice nice poem !

[Shellie]

Shouldnt then be than? Its good, I like the flow...it flows better than the prayer. Love the first 3 lines most of all, That I think is very romantic in itself, that a heartstopping embrace would make you feel more alive than a near death experience.

[barricade]

Wonderful!!! a true beauty in itself!!! what a girl...if the write in itself is so pure...can't even imagine what the woman of your dream will be like!!!

"A heart-stopping embrace
That makes me feel more alive
Then a near death experience.
A kiss that stops the world
Till time is nothing more
Then where I am.
Eyes like that of heaven
Showing me salvations
From loves wrong doings."

just can't stop praisin you for this write!!! its so magical!!! the words...perfect! a true masterpiece woven by you!!!
great work!!! loved it....!!! and may you meet the woman of your dreams soon!!! god bless ya!!!

regards
barricade...

[Katchzen]

She is a lovely dream, and I wish you the best of luck in finding her.

"A heart-stopping embrace
That makes me feel more alive
Then a near death experience.
A kiss that stops the world
Till time is nothing more
Then where I am."

Not much can make someone feel more alive than a reminder of their own mortality, but I believe such love as you write about could certainly come close. These lines got stuck in my head, so I had to come back and read them again.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This poem has a well balanced rhyme and meter. The words are inviting and should be penned on a pillow.

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WooHoo! I'm right here...the woman of your dreams! Or maybe not. I think this is a beautiful piece of writing that speaks from the heart with such poetic conviction. The last part is wonderful. The truest love is certainly worth waiting for.