Get Your Tongue Out Of My Mouth, I'm Trying To Kiss You Goodbye

I want to thank my dear friend Sandy Beaches for the title and challenge

 

Well of course I packed my suitcase,

 

Did you think I’d leave without some clothes?

 

I told you bout this a while ago…

 

I guess you were

 

Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention.

 

 

Why I couldn’t leave without a few things

 

And I know you were too busy with Jim Beam.

 

 

I can’t see what the big deal is…

 

It’s not like you will even notice,

 

Half the time I am a ghost around here

 

While you’re living just to party.

 

 

I’ve told you where I am staying…

 

 

Even wrote it down, you probably threw it out

 

Like you do my feelings when we talk.

 

 

I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn’t hurt…

 

              Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,

 

I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.

 

 

Once again you’re not listening…

 

And you wonder why I’m leaving.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[closed account]

ooooohhhhhhhh shoot..... this was good, love the attitude, the self confidence that
you represent! the assertivness of why you are leaving.. and most important!!!
you state why you are gone... great job.. with this.. this was actually a book i read
well the title anyway,, I loved it,,, you didn't even know, cause I didn't tell you that
but excuted it right on... thank you!!

[Wildecat]

This is awesome Dale, I totally enjoyed reading this. Well done.

[Winter McPherson]

"I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn't hurt�



Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,



I'm kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.





Once again your not listening�



And you wonder why I'm leaving."

Love that......and you wonder why I'm leaving....
Good job!

[just is]

OH! My! Gosh! Dale, this is a hoot and also sad to see love walking away, wonderful write. Love the sttitude and gumption in this.

[Lyrical Love]

Wooooooo!
Liked this Big C!!!
I could smell the sourness of her breath... and feel the staleness of the air.
This was almost cinematic/4D if you will.
A different voice for you, and done well.
Kudos!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very entertaining! I love the change of style that you're giving, but maybe I'm not as familiar with all your works as some, but this was very fun, very visual and an underlined message of paying attention. I've been in the situation, and I get it completely. You've written it with flair and a humor that kept me until the end....

Great write

[perfectlymetiKulous]

This was great. I loved the determination, the matter-of-factness.
My fav lines:
"I told you bout this a while ago�
I guess you were
Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention."

I can't tell you how many times I've felt THAT way. :)
Glad I came across this for my first read this morning.

[An owl on the moon]

This was the perfect poem for an early morning! Expressive and vivid and just plain fun, sailing through the lives of selfish people and lost love...

[Sheila Kline]

Good sense of humor Dale......tell it like it is! Girl, get moving!!!!
You did a great job of meeting the challenge!
Hugs, Sheila

[Tiana]

I just can't imagine any woman ignoring you and not give you any attention when you're such a cutie! :)) Glad it was written for Sandy's challenge. Great poem ... Hugs

[Butterflymom]

I love it! I love the range of emotions expressed, and your sense of humor is awesome. Nice write.