Get Your Tongue Out Of My Mouth, I'm Trying To Kiss You Goodbye

I want to thank my dear friend Sandy Beaches for the title and challenge

 

Well of course I packed my suitcase,

 

Did you think I’d leave without some clothes?

 

I told you bout this a while ago…

 

I guess you were

 

Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention.

 

 

Why I couldn’t leave without a few things

 

And I know you were too busy with Jim Beam.

 

 

I can’t see what the big deal is…

 

It’s not like you will even notice,

 

Half the time I am a ghost around here

 

While you’re living just to party.

 

 

I’ve told you where I am staying…

 

 

Even wrote it down, you probably threw it out

 

Like you do my feelings when we talk.

 

 

I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn’t hurt…

 

              Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,

 

I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.

 

 

Once again you’re not listening…

 

And you wonder why I’m leaving.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[closed account]

ooooohhhhhhhh shoot..... this was good, love the attitude, the self confidence that
you represent! the assertivness of why you are leaving.. and most important!!!
you state why you are gone... great job.. with this.. this was actually a book i read
well the title anyway,, I loved it,,, you didn't even know, cause I didn't tell you that
but excuted it right on... thank you!!

[Fran Marie]

Oh my, she just doesn't get it eh?~ probably from too much boozing ~ at any rate you
met this challenge quite well with a great take on the phrase~Well DonE! my friend

Fran

[Nicole Renee]

I really liked reading this poem, and that the description of this poem is pretty visual and to the point. ^_^

[EpicKizzy]

holly-crap i like this poem it is true every word to the end true.....................................

[Spoken]

sassy metaphoric smack in the face. Love the attitude. You can't love someone who loves a bottle more than you. denying the truth only leads to devistation when you walk out that door. By following the way of addiction you are only creating a path to your own bottom. An ultimate low, a death trap many don't survive. Trying to escape life is impossible, b/c it never goes away.

Powerful piece and love the title!

[poetic soul]

painful and so perfect with the description of the emotion........lovely

:) Smiles,
Poetic Soul

[Lauren Beth]

I really like this...I too liked the confidence that is shown in your words. Very powerful and a great read! Harsh but so real. Good job on the challenge ;)

[Ralphy]

OMG, I can't believe this write. I know this feeling so well and it shed a light on attention to details we as people pay to each other. How well do we listen. This is great Dale, I like the way it flows down the page�Get your tongue out of my mouth�lol

[Wildfleour]

Oouch!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Amanda]

sounded like my situation, but in reverse...loved the attitude and the sense of humor you used throughout this piece. it's interesting how it looks from the other side. a little more straightforward than your usual writing, but i like it. you always put a different spin on things, my dear Dale. good job :)

A

[cilla]

What a sad truth you written about and were able to keep things in perspective with a good sense of humor. Sometimes, a person can get so wrapped up in themselves that they become blind to everything else. Once you're gone, she be saying, "Damn, I wonder what was bothering him? He could've at least talk it over."

Well, the poem's great and the title is a real killer. Add a dog and pick-up and you've got one helluva C/W tune � I'm humming it already!

Great stuff � keep it coming!