Get Your Tongue Out Of My Mouth, I'm Trying To Kiss You Goodbye

I want to thank my dear friend Sandy Beaches for the title and challenge

 

Well of course I packed my suitcase,

 

Did you think I’d leave without some clothes?

 

I told you bout this a while ago…

 

I guess you were

 

Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention.

 

 

Why I couldn’t leave without a few things

 

And I know you were too busy with Jim Beam.

 

 

I can’t see what the big deal is…

 

It’s not like you will even notice,

 

Half the time I am a ghost around here

 

While you’re living just to party.

 

 

I’ve told you where I am staying…

 

 

Even wrote it down, you probably threw it out

 

Like you do my feelings when we talk.

 

 

I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn’t hurt…

 

              Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,

 

I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.

 

 

Once again you’re not listening…

 

And you wonder why I’m leaving.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[closed account]

ooooohhhhhhhh shoot..... this was good, love the attitude, the self confidence that
you represent! the assertivness of why you are leaving.. and most important!!!
you state why you are gone... great job.. with this.. this was actually a book i read
well the title anyway,, I loved it,,, you didn't even know, cause I didn't tell you that
but excuted it right on... thank you!!

[My Fair Lady]

Even when we say what we really feel.. if it falls on deaf ears then it doesn't matter anymore.. does it.
Once again your not listening…
And you wonder why I’m leaving.
Very Good.

[Hustle Consciousness]

doesnt it suck when your trying to break it off with someone and they try to keep u around? great feelings expressed

[Moonflower]

This was like tough love, cool and indifferent. Very well done, interesting read.

[J.Black]

" Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,
I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed." .... love those lines! it's so easy to relate to this, so you've won in this piece as a writer! haha i see this is an oldie you're bringing back to life! unfortunately, i dont like the title. I think it gives away too much to begin with... i know you can def think of something as a tease!

[Lizanne]

Tongue in cheek satire! Enjoyed this piece, glad you got some brass and had enough class to say "out of here." Walking tall now! You did great with the title and work you created. You stated your case, prosecuted and passed judgement, freeing yourself to find happiness with someone that will give you what you need, instead of taking, taking, taking.

[cest la vie]

This is awesome. The title sets the stage for a clearly, I'm outta here moment.. It has a bit of bitter humor as well. Nicely done!!

[Bethany Woody]

I love the onsided conversational tone this piece has. The title really catches your notice and compells you to read the piece. I think I love it, but it's a bit confusing. Should I laugh or cry because I want to do both. It's sad to be so misunderstood, so unnoticed and ignored. But it's also funny, because it's not necessarily that the person doesn't care they are just really clueless and tone deaf to the signals in the relationship. Now that I think about it thats more sad then funny. Aw well, still it's a great piece.

[Belinda Rice]

Great poem again this shows a lot of feeling of wanting to say that goodbye and not holding anything back or for granted Good one Koodo's

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Even wrote down, probably threw it out
Like you do my feelings when we talk. (I REALLY LIKED THAT LINE. GOOD METAPHOR)

good piece. wow... you the man. women can't help but keep wanting you even when you show them the door! ha ha. i thik you did a good job at acceptintg the challenge that sandy beaches gave you, and showing usp something entertaining. i liked it. i had flashbacks of me and some of my exe's, and i was in this situation too. me as the girl.

thanks for sharing.

[Starting Over]

Loved this! You shouldnt stay with someone if they dont listen and respect you!