Get Your Tongue Out Of My Mouth, I'm Trying To Kiss You Goodbye

I want to thank my dear friend Sandy Beaches for the title and challenge

 

Well of course I packed my suitcase,

 

Did you think I’d leave without some clothes?

 

I told you bout this a while ago…

 

I guess you were

 

Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention.

 

 

Why I couldn’t leave without a few things

 

And I know you were too busy with Jim Beam.

 

 

I can’t see what the big deal is…

 

It’s not like you will even notice,

 

Half the time I am a ghost around here

 

While you’re living just to party.

 

 

I’ve told you where I am staying…

 

 

Even wrote it down, you probably threw it out

 

Like you do my feelings when we talk.

 

 

I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn’t hurt…

 

              Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,

 

I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.

 

 

Once again you’re not listening…

 

And you wonder why I’m leaving.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[closed account]

ooooohhhhhhhh shoot..... this was good, love the attitude, the self confidence that
you represent! the assertivness of why you are leaving.. and most important!!!
you state why you are gone... great job.. with this.. this was actually a book i read
well the title anyway,, I loved it,,, you didn't even know, cause I didn't tell you that
but excuted it right on... thank you!!

[The Analog Kid]

I like how in your face this one is. And in your mouth....lol!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir.

[Chris]

Sometimes recycling a work is necessary...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes it is for the newcomers.

[Chris]

depending on how many we've still open for viewing - even the oldsters too

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

that is true.

[KAOlmsted]

So many typos, so little time ;-) "coarse" is "course"; "You did" could be "Did you" or "You didn't"; I won't even bore you with how much I hate "bout"; "to busy" is "too busy"; "your living" is "you're living"; "wrote down" might sound better as "wrote it down"; "your not" is "you're not"...and for those of you out there in Review Land who want to take the piss out of me for editing Dale, f**k off...this is like foreplay to us.

xD

Seriously...this is really cute. Whatever the challenge was, I think you may have nailed it ;-) Really fun read.

xoxo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Damn I really put you to work this morning, I cannot believe all the mistakes I had in that one. read moreDamn I really put you to work this morning, I cannot believe all the mistakes I had in that one.

Glad you enjoyed it though. It was fun to write.

[KAOlmsted]

Ha! I figured it's been a while since I took you over my knee ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well if I paid you by the word you would be set for the next month, LOL

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Frieda P]

Well you freaking told her!! Love the moxy in this write...go you! ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Stef Outsiders]

awesome... catchy too!

[.]

wow..that's a slap in the face..b***h arse hard slap..but she sounds like she deserved it

[OT]

haha such a veracious attitude in this one!! I like a lot!!

[Ladysue]

oh this is the best...Once again your not listening...and you wonder why I'm leaving...last four line are so tremendous...I agree with Liza in all the she said...excellent piece...

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is great. (: I really liked the self-assertive attitude. GREAT!!

[Liza]

body language misinterpreted you set it straight - listen with your eyes - see my intent - i don't live to please you - goodbye....

great piece!