Get Your Tongue Out Of My Mouth, I'm Trying To Kiss You Goodbye

I want to thank my dear friend Sandy Beaches for the title and challenge

 

Well of course I packed my suitcase,

 

Did you think I’d leave without some clothes?

 

I told you bout this a while ago…

 

I guess you were

 

Too wrapped up in your self again to pay attention.

 

 

Why I couldn’t leave without a few things

 

And I know you were too busy with Jim Beam.

 

 

I can’t see what the big deal is…

 

It’s not like you will even notice,

 

Half the time I am a ghost around here

 

While you’re living just to party.

 

 

I’ve told you where I am staying…

 

 

Even wrote it down, you probably threw it out

 

Like you do my feelings when we talk.

 

 

I guess one kiss before I leave wouldn’t hurt…

 

              Damn girl get your tongue out of my mouth,

 

I’m kissing you goodbye not taking you to bed.

 

 

Once again you’re not listening…

 

And you wonder why I’m leaving.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[closed account]

ooooohhhhhhhh shoot..... this was good, love the attitude, the self confidence that
you represent! the assertivness of why you are leaving.. and most important!!!
you state why you are gone... great job.. with this.. this was actually a book i read
well the title anyway,, I loved it,,, you didn't even know, cause I didn't tell you that
but excuted it right on... thank you!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh WoW!
Now this is a way to vent!..Expressing your view on a relatable topic can stir up a many emotions...

From love to hate, it's one and the same when it comes to a tumultuous relationship.

Well penned! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much... glad you liked it.

[shallimarRose]

Well Cowboy, you know we have to read with a title like that one..
I think this is typical of a relationship with someone who is overindulgent..
"Too wrapped up in yoursefto pay attention,
too busy with'Jim Beam"

I enjoyed the read.. xo Rose

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, I think we all have been in a relationship with some like that.

[shallimarRose]

you're probably right.. you have fun at the concert.. xoxo

[Dye]

Reminds me of an Ex. "Once again you're not listening..." Great story telling.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, I think we all have an ex like that.

[Corset]

lol, you are not suppose to give goodbye kisses, unless you are only going on a road trip! You are lucky it wasn't bitten off :P just saying..This is funny! Thanks for the smile.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You actually make a great point, but then I am bit of a daredevil

[Corset]

hahaha! well I wouldn't have expected less from a Rock n Roll cowboy!

[Rossen]

Cowboy upped before hitting the trail... off into blazing sunset~

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you sir.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

once again you're not listening...
And you wonder why I'm leaving. -- isn't this the truth...

A strong write. I like the first person perspective in this, because it truly feels as though you are speaking the piece to the one who has wronged you. Very effective in the emotional department...up until the end, I was thinking it was the woman leaving; transference, I guess, but that means that you did your job of putting the reader in your shoes in this one.

For me, the best part of this was the strength in the speaker's voice. The absolute determination and confidence that this is the "right thing"...so many people take this walk out of the door, but few do it with such resolve and committment.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, glad you liked it... it could be a man or woman, it does happen to both. Thank you for your precious time.

[SyberRose]

ha...the older we get the less we hear ha...in a world of our own...my husband tells me
I don't hear anything anymore...im in poetry land...:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well as we get older we get set in our ways.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem my friend. Funny how people hear what they want to hear. Nice flow of thoughts and i like the purpose of the poem. Feel like a good drinking song. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry my friend.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much sir... you are right some are so self involved they only hear what suits them.

[written in blood]

that was 3 years ago?? *tear.. omg yes I remember loved it then and so much appreciate it more now.. awesome job..

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for the inspiring title to challenge me at the time.

[written in blood]

it was a book I read, and I loved the title!!

[Marie]

You can tell people over and over again, and if they aren't listening you might as well not say anything at all.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You got that right. Better off talking to a wall.