The Elements Of My Life

  

When I hear the wind howl

I get lost in the call

Of the wild

Meant for souls like me

Who find home sweet home

Slipping through the trees

Like hidden dreams

That subliminally keep

The spirit alive.

 

As I float down fear’s river

I learned it is better

To just let go

And let the water

Drown me in its rage

So I can drink its pain

Like blessed wine

From a holy chalice

As my heart drifts away

To the waterfall of faith.

 

The feel from the dirt of the land

Sifting through my fingers

Like an hourglass

Is my wake up call

That my time on earth

Is where my soul grows

So I can flourish in heaven

Spreading the seeds of my hope

To loved ones below.

 

Though I may never

Set the world on fire

My life is not a waste

As long as I leave a flame

In the hearts of all

The ones I love.

Reviews

[Ralphy]

Wonderful Dale, I love the way it flows and how you place this image in your readers minds, it's quite fascinating. I don't need to tell you my favorite lines because you know me well enough...but there they are...
Though I may never
Set the world on fire
My life is not a waste
As long as I leave a flame
In the hearts of all
The ones I love.

wonderful wrte

[Lilly]

A beautifully written and thought provoking write. I especially love the last stanza. Those are words to remember. I'm glad I found this to read today - It is just the sort of thing I need right now. Thanks for sharing it with us all.

[The Analog Kid]

Well the ending is simply beautiful. Nice layout with a looseness of form. Now what I really loved is second stanza. "As my heart drifts away/To the waterfall of faith." There's just something about the dark unknown of the river as a poetic device that always haunts me. It's the unknown. You juxtapose the against faith and I find it complex. It's not just the fear of going over the falls, but the cleansing power of the water.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

that last stanza says it all~ we are all worthwhile and important to someone~beautifully written~

[Katchzen]

"...my time on earth
Is where my soul grows
So I can flourish in heaven"

I never thought of it like that before. You've made me think, and this might take awhile.

[DanaRegen]

Well written and beautiful poem!
Once again youve written a fabulous poem, great job.
-Dana :)

[Wildecat]

Dale, another excellent piece of poetry, always a pleasure to read your poetry.

[Seriana]

Wow! Simply wow....this is an excellent piece Dale! I'm digging the entire second stanza! But, I like this verse too:
"Like hidden dreams
That subliminally keep
The spirit alive."

Keep it up. I think your my male counterpart when it comes to the emotional writing. I'm glad we can connect that way. :)

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

This is beautiful!! I really like this one!! Great Work!!! Sorry it took so long to review, I've been really busy!!

[TL Boehm]

I have to concur with Ralphy (waves at Ralphy) I found the whole poem wonderful but really gravitated to that last stanza. It is anthemic, simply stated, yet profound. Well done!

[~angelalala~]

that 1st stanza is amazing & really sets the perfect tone for this piece. the way you incorporate elements, such as water, wind, is amazing. this poem is so full of hope, so full of wisdom. a truly beautiful write.