I Try

  

I try to give all I can

       To those in my heart needing comfort

Sometimes I bleed too much

       Suffocating them.

 

I try to find the time

       To guide those needing a compass

Sometimes I get lost

       In a New York minute

 

I try to see the humanity

       In everyone that crosses my path

Sometimes I Criticize

       Forgetting they are human

 

I always try to be Able

Yet find myself

Raising Cain instead.

 

 

Reviews

[Joanna Maharis]

There is so much beauty to this piece. However, you have a special gift for incorporating imagery in your poetry, such as what you did with Crystal Eyes, of which I was able to connect with the narrator. With I Try, I don't feel as connected with the narrator as I did with the poem Crystal Eyes. When you have imagery throughout your pieces of writing, it is pure magic, such as there is with Crystal Eyes. The spark is missing from I Try.

[Brianna Brie]

I always try to be Able
Yet find myself
Raising Cain instead.

I like the word play at the end of this poem. It may be a clever pun, but ever so true. We will always struggle as humans.

[LonelySoul]

much like my own poem,this moves me in alot of ways...
mine in reference is called "Lord... I Tried"...where it tells of my struggles to make my mark on humanity.
this Left a mark in my soul,Thank You for it,as I will remember,and treasure...

[~angelalala~]

"Sometimes I Criticize

Forgetting they are human" i loved this poem.this line in particular struck me, i can relate. sometimes you try too hard to help others & end up losing yourself. i like the religious reference at the end, able & cain. simple, but a powerful message that we all can relate to. a great write.

[J.Black]

"

I try to give all I can

To those in my heart needing comfort

Sometimes I bleed too much

Suffocating them." -- pulled me in my the first stanza, yes yes yes! I love poems like this. Anywho, this was really a beautiful write Dale. Basically a self-reflection are the best ones and you proved that. It's true no one is perfect, however you are perfect in my eyes and I guess that's all that really matters, my friend.

[Seriana]

This is wonderful Dale. I hear ya, loud and clear. How often do we all feel this way, huh? Well, maybe not all of us, but I'll stand beside you on this one. You forgot to add one part, though. The part about giving so much, that sometimes you get stepped on and taken advantage of. ;)
Nicely written. Your writing has really been getting alot better. It's nice to see you growing as a writer.

[~Mary Ann~]

No one is perfect. :) An honest and heartfelt write and a piece of self reflection that others can identify with. Well done Dale Vincent. ;p

[closed account]

this was very true to ones self type of poem....my favorites!! when you can see the human error in your way! Thats when you know that you are on the right path to be the best you can be!! not the best
what others say you should be! I love the meaning, I love the flow, and move over brother,.... I want to sit right next to you with this one!!! good job!

[Rhine Wolf]

a good write full of emotion and love for thoes you love.

Blessed be,
Fallon

[Bexers]

This is a very good piece of work.
I think everyone can relate on some level to this.
I know I did!

Keep up the great work.