This Moment

  

When you looked me in the eyes

As those clouds of baby blue

Rained down on sensitive skin

That radiates like the sun

From the beat of your heart.

As I held that umbrella

To shield you from the storm of hate

I actually felt like Atlas.

 

And in this moment

I finally became real

 

 

When I touched your skin

With my working mans hands

So dirty and rough

From a day out in the grind

You didn’t even flinch

Suddenly all the aches and pains

Of everyday living felt like

Sensations of a heaven’s breeze.

 

It was in this moment

I knew you were real.

 

When a closet full of

Jealous bones buried us

We still held hands

Laying six feet deep

As our hearts kept beating

Till the graveyard could

No longer keep us down

And the tombstone read…

 

“From this moment on these two are real”

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

Wow Dale this is just so amazingly beautiful. I could cry because this poem has just touched me too much. How many of us feel unreal or unworthy in this world? To find that special someone who can wash all of those bad feelings away, that's my definition of being blessed and at the core of what real friendship, love and acceptance truly are.

[Emily B]

beautiful, Dale. Especially the image of working man hands. There is something written deeply in the callouses and lines of a man's rough hands.

[*** Hey Jude***]

Wow, this is is so descriptive with beautiful images expressing the strenght of Real Love, its power and healing. Beautiful ~ Jude :-)

[Miss Prince]

Oh this is sweet. I love the imagery at the end, and the descriptions of her eyes! FABULOUS! I really like this one. It's so sweet...

[Laura E. Aranda]

so beautiful! Thanks for asking me to stop by and read it....I am so forwarding this one on!!!!! Great visual piece! Cheers,lea

[The DuchessPoet]

I LOVE what you give... A protective romance!
My favorite stanza:
""When I touched your skin

With my working mans hands
So dirty and rough
From a day out in the grind
You didn't even flinch
Suddenly all the aches and pains
Of everyday living felt like
Sensations of a heaven's breeze""

***With workin mans hands!***

You are such my flirt! :)

I feel sooo safe in your essence!

I absolutely love this Cowboy... you are so gifted!

[Spoken]

sounds like you know what real love is...

I like the bold lines. They really.. say it all.

i'm out of words.. just wonderful

[Brianna Brie]

Whoa...what an unusual and unique ending to this poem.

When I touched your skin
With my working mans hands
So dirty and rough
From a day out in the grind
You didn't even flinch
Suddenly all the aches and pains
Of everyday living felt like
Sensations of a heaven's breeze.

Love these words...so pure and meaningful. Lovely write!

[Wildfleour]

This is a tremendous write, Dale.

I love the image of a working man's hands - the essence of male. Awesome.

[Ladysue]

Wow Dale, so incredibly full of beauty. I agree with Blackbird finding that someone special that you can laugh with each other and all else that makes the pain go away is very special. What a beautiful piece of writing.

[Mysty Rayn]

This is so beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes to real it. You always amaze me, even when I think you can't anymore, I an blown away by your words. This poem could not be anymore perfect.