Your first stanza is a doozy! Good work, in fact the entire piece is very descriptive with vivid imagery throughout, I almost forgot to breathe at the end! Your message is profound, many cannot let go of apron strings never daring to jump into the deep end, too risky..they want to, but fear of life won't allow it and I guess life itself can be daunting, but we should actively take part in our own happiness.
Terrific concept and parallels Dale :-)
I liked this a lot. The symbolism was great and it puts the reader in a good mood. the imagery was beautiful too and it flows nicely.
great write and thank you for requesting it =]
This has an abysmal, spiritual feel to it propelling me into an alternate state of being. I agree with the others, it is truly beautiful. I like this piece. Nice job on it.
Oh Dale, this is such an inspiring and a beautifully uplifting piece. Yes, explore the new horizons and live. You have expressed this message with great stride!!! Loved it!!!
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
This is my world of
my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..