Your first stanza is a doozy! Good work, in fact the entire piece is very descriptive with vivid imagery throughout, I almost forgot to breathe at the end! Your message is profound, many cannot let go of apron strings never daring to jump into the deep end, too risky..they want to, but fear of life won't allow it and I guess life itself can be daunting, but we should actively take part in our own happiness.
Terrific concept and parallels Dale :-)
Love is everything, it can never be enough love there, wonderfully woven. 3rd stanza is my favorite. (congrat on a new president. I watched the elections whole night. )
Very pretty......I like the flow of this peace....of just letting go of the fears and accepting what you can not change. I needed to read this one. Thanks! Cheers,lea
Your first stanza is a doozy! Good work, in fact the entire piece is very descriptive with vivid imagery throughout, I almost forgot to breathe at the end! Your message is profound, many cannot let go of apron strings never daring to jump into the deep end, too risky..they want to, but fear of life won't allow it and I guess life itself can be daunting, but we should actively take part in our own happiness.
Terrific concept and parallels Dale :-)
An excellent read! I love how you stray away from the fear of death we usually have, but encourage us to embrace it. This has a good message and it's presented in a beautiful way!
Wow, I needed to hear this tonight. How wonderful and insightful. You poured the words right into my soul like it was written for me. I don't know who it's about but I can pretend ;) Thanks for sharing this great piece.
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
This is my world of
my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..