I'll Be

  

I’ll be the friend

Who walks down the street

Hand in hand

Even if it leads

To a dead end.

 

I’ll be the dream

So when you are sleeping

The safety

Of your fears

Remains secret.

 

I’ll be the rhythm

So your heart will never

Beat alone

And those slow dances

Feels like home.

 

I’ll be the rock

When you need strength

I’ll be the wind

When you need to be alone.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

wow darling - you've just gotten better and better as i've been away. you still have that simple, rhyming style, but you'd added layers of depth to it.

couple grammatical things - first paragraph, second line - should be WALKS

"I'll be the rhythm

So our heart will never

Beat alone

And those slow dances

Feels like home."

That's my favorite verse - btu you do need to change heart to "hearts" - make it plural.

Then the ending - about being alone and you'll be the wind? what a wonderful way to say that. As though - I'll give you your privacy, but i'll be all around you still. Lovely.

Kara

[JustWantLove]

Hopeful, serene and comforting. Well-written!

[Georgia Gypsy]

That is the vision of the perfect love, truely a beautiful image.

[Dianne]

Wow, nice sentement. You're getting a head start on Valentines Day with this one. I really like the way this one makes me feel. Great job.

[emmajoy]

Beautiful words, wonderfully sincere intentions, all put down in such a finely constructed poem.

' I'll be the rhythm / So your heart will never / Beat alone / And those slow dances / Feels like home.'

Those lines suggest a guardian angel and everyone but everyone needs one.

Thank you for sharing.

(Hope you feel better soon)

[Brenda Sue]

This should be a song. Truly beautiful. Great job.

[Helen Woodward]

Beautiful words Dale, I hope they don't fall on deaf ears...and are targetted at the right person.
Nice work :-)

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This is chivalrous, simplistic and all around nice. You've captured the essence of romance here. Good work.

[Laura E. Aranda]

awwwwwwwww
TOE CURL

this is so hallmark sweet
Cheers ,lea

[Norma J. Jessee]

Dale, This is fantastic. Beautifully written. Very moving. It touches the heart and floods the soul with a feeling of warmth and security.
Deeply moving, fantastic write
This is on its way to my fav's

[Angelic Darkness]

LOVE, LOVE, LOVE THIS! These are sweet words that any person would
want to hear. This is absolutely my favorite line: I'll be the rhythm

So your heart will never

Beat alone

Every day you grow more and more talented, conhuring up
feelings, and connecting with you as the writer. This is going
into my favs my sweet:)

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