Broken Trail

new lyrics I just wrote

  

I started on this journey

        

         Of my lifetime

 

Riding off into

 

         That one and only sunset

 

Where golden beams

 

         Highlight forever

 

Letting love’s guidance

 

         Be our treasure.

 

Now something has broken

Splitting the road

 

Here I am now walking along

This broken trail

That has me stepping towards

A personal hell

No turning back to burning bridges

So I walk this broken trail

 

 

Without a horse

        

To lead me to water

 

My feelings are parched

 

         As my heartache is on fire

 

Burning like a wildfire

        

         Through my passion

 

Till there is nothing left

 

         But dust and ashes

 

 

Suddenly I am lost

Without a trace

 

Here I am now walking along

This broken trail

That has me stepping towards

A personal hell

No turning back to burning bridges

So I walk this broken trail

Reviews

[Angel Bird]

Pssscchhht listen to this beautiful song of a lonely cowboy with a broken heart. I can even hear the guitar playing ...

These are fabulous lyrics. You've definitely created a perfect song here. I'd like to hear it one day on the radio or to see this as a wonderful clip on TV.

Thumb up Cowboy, you've excelled again.

[Anima Inspired]

Very sad...poignant read. This struck an emotional chord with me, as you managed to really get to the heart of lonliness in this one...I can relate to your words, and that's probably why the read is struck me so. Bravo.

[Mysty Rayn]

This is so sad. It broke my heart to think you are walking this trail. Maybe if you hold your head up and don't look down so often it will seem less broken. The write is beautiful.

[Fantasyfairy]

A sad and beautiful poem. I love the way the words just blend so well, it really is written for a song, and would be beautiful with a nice simple melody. XX

[Brianna Brie]

Life does have a way of putting us on a different trail than the one we wanted. Great metaphor...full of the emotions of a crooked trail. A cowboy without his horse...this alone is an upset in the natural balance of things. Job well done!

[Emily B]

It's all well and good as far as it goes--but lyrics are meant to be sung. Let's hear it! :-)

I like the images you present. Especially the line "Where golden beams highlight forever."

[emmajoy]

Before reading your friends' reviews and your little snippet above, I thought these were lyrics for a song... and can truly hear soft chords of a guitar mingling with a deep voice. It's a sad song, melancholic and heart felt : 'My feelings are parched / As my heartache is on fire ' - that second line is sad but wonderfully put.

Write some happy lyrics soon, then we can sing along with you.

[Norma J. Jessee]

Love this Dale, As I read the words a rhythm starts to form and I can hear the music and it has this lonely tone to it. I can also hear a very soft whisling, it's the melody of the song being whisled in the background. and there's also the soft clop- clop of a horse walking and a picture starts to form in my mind, of a lone cowboy on a horse just mosey-ing along with the cowboy whistling the song.
I love it. Very beautiful lyrics. Into my favorites.

[Antony]

i like all the descriptive words you use in this piece, to show how you are feeling. so go find that horse, climb back on, as you always have before and this time use them spurs or you will die in the desert. Nice write my friend.
Tony