Ghost Town

 

The bitter winds of sorrow

blows the tumbleweed

that was once blissful hope

through the lonely streets

filled with regret and despair.

 

Invisible to the naked eye

is the essence of the happy faces

that once filled the saloon

that looked so much

like you and me.

 

Now the road is filled with dust

covering what was a great love

that was shot through the heart

when it was thought

my aim wasn’t true.

 

As the sun sets in the west

I can’t find the will to saddle up

To leave this lonely town

and move forward into a city

that holds laughter and hope

for the ghost of you is still

the only place the spirit of me

wants to cross over too.

 

 

Reviews

[Lori]

Wonderful poem -- from the title (which so perfectly captures the essence of the poem) to the very evocative end. It conjures up not just images but sensations of loneliness and pain. We feel your spirit trapped here in this place (both in the mind and physically) that really is an emotional Ghost Town, because it's been abandoned by the loved one. I love how we tie the small town's physical place in with the internal state.

[z]

great poem, it was sad, but sweet at the same time. my only correction is that i think you meant the word saloon in the second stanza where you put 'salon'
Invisible to the naked eye
is the essence of the happy faces
that once filled the [saloon]
that looked so much
like you and me.

[Brianna Brie]

I like...you managed to carry the theme out nicely. Got to love the old west and their tumble weeds. lol Seriously, I miss the steamy writes of old, but more than understand the need to go with the mood. Pump out those broken heart poems while you feel it. Well done!!

[Belinda Rice]

Dale this is very sad ,lovly and beautiful...again you poor out the true meaning of the heart and spirit and the true essencesof true writing....yo have this had that just know when to write the most inspiring peices,and the true mind of a poet...you have so much potental,I am glad that you shared this with me ty so very much and God Bless....

[Wildfleour]

Very sweet, Dale.

[Nely Amorim]

I couldn't say it better than Spoken just did below:

"so this is how a cowboy's heart breaks...."

I'm sad for you my friend and indeed the imagery does make it more vivid to me, I hope you find a wonderful sunset or a clear blue sky in your next day... good luck. wonderful piece :)

[Anima Inspired]

Very sad...tragically beautiful actually. I love the way that you carried the "cowboy/wild west" theme throughout the piece and then related it to something that we all know deeply...the loss of love. A few pluralization problems...the second line "blow" instead of "blows", second stanza second line, add a "the" before essence...but overall, very nicely done.

[Antony]

Very descriptive, I can see all this so clearly, a great piece Dale. Favorite lines
for the ghost of you is still
the only place the spirit of me
wants to cross over too.
Tony

[Colleen C Dunphy]

All i can say is that this is beautiful and moving.
*hugs*

Best always,
Lee

[Angel Bird]

Brilliant metaphor! The pain of an abandoned and lonely cowboy wonderfully clothed into words and images.

A profound sadness reflects in every word.

Perfectly done! A great read!

[T]

Such a sad and heartfelt poem, Dale ... To dwell in a Ghost town haunted by a past love that still burns in your heart is very heart breaking ... Wonderfully expressed, Dale ... hugs