The Talk

a conversation between my heart and mind

  

My heart had a talk

With my wandering mind

Letting it know

You are such a fool.

Letting go of the perfect woman

With thought of things

That didn’t exists

And being to prideful and loud.

My mind replied

I was just thinking

And the heart woefully interrupted

That’s your problem

Always thinking

And now you cost me

The woman who held me

With more beauty and grace

Then I ever thought

And now thanks to you

The one I truly love is gone.

My mind cried out

I know me too.

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

And now thanks to you

The one I truly love is gone.

My mind cried out

I know me too.




A poignant piece , when the heart and mind are not in harmony

the heart may feel the pain in the breakup~but it's the mind that will torment you

and send you on the guilt trip~ Great WritE! my friend~Fran

[O!]

huh?!....hope not true!!!....?! HUH?!

nice write with a few typos but am more worried about the fact if this is true or not!?!!

:-(

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[Adrian K. Smith]

This piece, this piece, excuse my language - f***s with me. It is something that I could have written but days ago, it is something I may yet write; that battle between the mind and the heart - the heart just feeling love, just full of smiles and hugs - just full of love. The mind, with all my baggage - with all the obstacles - the distance - just badgering away at my heart each and every moment of every minute of every f*****g day. The mind just putting so much there, the accusations - the poems written in reply about the accusations - my insecurities, my jealousy, my lack of trust - and I kept pushing her away - then scrambling to try to make it better, but pushing all of my guilt on her - all my problems on her... just pushing. Where this poem is, is one of the worst places to be - and the number of times I have taken myself there in past few weeks... the number of times that I though I had finally screwed it up beyond any repair... this piece, Cowboy... I would not want anybody ever to feel this, man... I feel it almost all the time, even when it is not the case - cause I know that it happened, that even though I got that second chance from her - that I went there, and crap - lol, I am at freaking work - I should not be tearing up like this - I just know it is a horrible place to be...

[Emily B]

oh, oh, oh,

no words

But I know that my mind and heart felt for you here.

[Brianna Brie]

And the heart woefully interrupted
That's your problem
Always thinking

The one I truly love is gone.
My mind cried out
I know me too.

This is refreshingly creative. The mind and heart are usually at odds when it really matters most. Why is that? Love the ending where the mind and heart finally agree about truly loving her. Two thumbs up on this poem!


I believe this is a typing error.
And being to prideful ad loud.

[Angel Bird]

Hey this is spectacular! While I read your lines I could really hear the two talking together, and it made me smile.

Oh yes in true life people all too often think way too much about things instead of following the desires and instincts of the heart.

Thumb up!

[Colleen C Dunphy]

*hugs*
It is good to have those kinds of talks. Even if it's hard. This is beautifully written.

Best,
Lee