Dark Cloud

  

Dark cloud

Please stay above me

And keep the harmful rays

Of blissful days

From burning any feelings

I have left.

 

Dark cloud

Show me how to cry

With magnum force

To relieve the pressure

In this human dam

Of misery.

 

Dark cloud

Please surround my heart

So no more emotions

Can find their way in

And destroying hope

Of happiness.

 

Dark cloud

As you drain the tears

From my soul

You are also squeezing out

Any breath I have left.

 

I guess I can never live.

Reviews

[Mysty Rayn]

Very powerful. Very emotional. There have been many days I have felt like this. They always pass. I promise they do. It may never seem sunny days will come again, it may seem you never want to see them again, but they sneak up on us and they can be so beautiful when they do. I hope this dark cloud passes for you, I hope there will be a day you want it to. I do understand how you feel at this moment. I have been there too many times before.

[Anima Inspired]

What an emotionally charged write... This speaks of tragedy and passion, depth of emotion and depth of pain...both that simply bring tears to my eyes. I like the idea of the "dark cloud" as both a protector and that which brings you to death...nicely written.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow I've felt like this enough to know you have expressed this emotion very well.
Ur flow is amazing!
Great Write!!

[T]

What an emotional heartfelt poem that ached my heart to read, Dale ... The pain and sadness you are experiencing may seem relentless at the moment, dear friend ... but this shall pass when you are good and ready to allow the healing process to begin ... Very moving poetry my friend ... hugs

[Antony]

Hey Dale, I can feel everything draining from your spirit, not good my friend. I have that same cumulonimbus hanging over my head as well and today is... Tormenting Tuesday, it is to be expected. This piece is very power packed with hopelessness, cheer up, better days are coming, sorry about your ache.
Tony

[Norma J. Jessee]

Very heartfelt and emotionally sad. I could tell you everything will be ok. I could tell you that things aren't as bad as they seem and that every cloud has a silver lining, that things will look better tomorrow, I could tell you a lot things, but none of them would matter because no one knows the weight of another's burden.

I will tell you that above the cloud with it's shadow is the star with it's light.

I hope things will soon be better because I hate to see you so sad.

[ape domenigoni]

I suck at reviews, I feel like I'm always saying the same thing. This poem is very sad.
Dark cloud

Please stay above me

And keep the harmful rays

Of blissful days

From burning any feelings

I have left

This is my favorite part of the poem....good work...I hope things get better for you.