Dark Cloud

  

Dark cloud

Please stay above me

And keep the harmful rays

Of blissful days

From burning any feelings

I have left.

 

Dark cloud

Show me how to cry

With magnum force

To relieve the pressure

In this human dam

Of misery.

 

Dark cloud

Please surround my heart

So no more emotions

Can find their way in

And destroying hope

Of happiness.

 

Dark cloud

As you drain the tears

From my soul

You are also squeezing out

Any breath I have left.

 

I guess I can never live.

Reviews

[Mysty Rayn]

Very powerful. Very emotional. There have been many days I have felt like this. They always pass. I promise they do. It may never seem sunny days will come again, it may seem you never want to see them again, but they sneak up on us and they can be so beautiful when they do. I hope this dark cloud passes for you, I hope there will be a day you want it to. I do understand how you feel at this moment. I have been there too many times before.

[Serendipity]

How beautifully painful.

A tear falls as I realize this was the life I lived for many years. My heart aches at the remembrance of my painful reality. Wishing this agony to no one. All my feelings burned away, all my hope of happiness was destroyed. My life a dam of misery, breathless, no more tears left ... simply a dead soul.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Simply beautiful poetry! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[SM Davis]

Perfect imagery here. Darkness and light are only separated by one thing. The dawn. And it comes, but sometimes it's timing is off.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Oh, i know exactly how u feel here. It's a battle that's immensely hard, i know. That cloud hanging over us could sometimes make us feel good, yet can also make us feel terrible, and we all wish that the sorrow and weeping would just end. I felt this a lot. Beautiful words here. Great job!

B.A.

[Haruki]

The emotional expression is very intense. I can truly feel your pain. The metaphores tell the tale in a most descriptive fashion. Beautiful poem.

[Courtney]

this one really hit home with me right now. thanks for writing it. i love evokative poetry, and you are so good at it.

[Emily B]

Dark Cloud. The personification is powerful. Don't hold too closely with the storm. Let the winds blow it out to sea. In due time, of course.

[Wildfleour]

I am so sorry you are feeling this way. It is a powerful write, Dale.

[Fran Marie]

Dark cloud

Please surround my heart

So no more emotions

Can find their way in

And destroying hope

Of happiness.



Oh my, what a sad piece this is, so deeply expressed~ I can feel the pain

of darkness surrounding the emotions within~THanks for sharing this

intense write so well written~Fran Marie