Candlelight And Wine

  

You light the candles

and let the essence of the glow

surround our uninhibited bodies

like the devoted feelings

that protects our hearts.

The beauty of the flames flickers

doesn’t compare to the ecstasy

lit by eternal destiny.

The wax begins to melt

as does our hearts

from unspoken words.

 

I’ll pop the cork and we can savor

the sweet aroma that is a powerful

as the undying devotion

we selflessly share.

The burgundy liquid flows

in connection with passion

that runs through our fingertips

intoxicating one another’s flesh.

 

So as the candlelight illuminates

to kindred silhouettes

the wine is a reminder

of our love that gets better with time.

 

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is such a beautiful, tender scene. I adore it - I wish I were experiencing it right now as a matter of fact. Just a few typo suggestions: In first stanza, protect instead of protects our hearts, 2nd stanza, as powerful instead of a powerful, last stanza, two instead of to kindred. Hope you don't mind the suggestions - would just flow even better that way I think. A lovely poem. One of my favorites.
Light,
Siddartha

[Lori]

Fine wine -- like your cabernet -- do get so much better with time! I like the way you put the immediacy (passion/lust) and the eternity (love) together in this poem with the candle and wine metaphors.

[Gandré]

the wine is a reminder / of our love that gets better with time.
---------------aww this is the old quote probably in each language... I love it.. true love has to be like wine the older the better....you are such a lyrical painter in our hearts.. you remain us at beauty of small moments...so this poem has its unique music...this poem gives expression to the connection between ground, feeling and love. I loved this creation!

[Windy]

Nice write, love the colors! Romantic, loving, sensual....great visuals...well done. ;)

[Colleen C Dunphy]

This makes me think of the song Melt by Rascal Flatts. It was totally going through my head as I read this. Very intimate and beautiful.

Great write.

Best,
Lee

[Laura Sparkle]

Beautiful and romantic! Great poem! You painted a perfect picture in the very nice manner you always do. :)