Cryptic Message

  

A fog covered dream

Of an angel bathing

In brimstone fire.

The charcoal waterfall

Offers no solution.

 

The devil watches

In wild eyed amazement

While he whispers

In my ear,

 

“Shhh…Do not tell the wizard

of that you so desire

or your requiem

will be out of tune”

 

Cryptic is his words

But deep in my soul  

I know…

 

I know therefore I fear!!!

 

Reviews

[alternative_be]

I like your very surprising use of imagenary. At first I get this very angelic, mystifying visualisation full of light ... soon to be juxtaposed by a very black vision. Reading this evokes a sense of duality. The duality of daily life, the duality of black and white, between which we are torn during the whole of our lifespan.
Like you are you writing: you know, therefore you fear...
Life can be frightening at times, that makes it so challenging and adventurous ...
I wish I could tell you to have no fear, because fear often gives you not the best of advice.
Sometimes we have to take risks in order to proceed ...
Please keep us surprising with this kind of mystifying cryptic words!

[Brette Medb]

I love the last line... It has a very mythical feel, which I love. I'm never surprised how good your words are. It made me think of a book I once read, I only wish I could remember the name!

[None]

It does seem sometimes that once we speak of something there are others preparing for our doom with it. Wonderfully captured and what a vision you paint with your words!

[Belinda Rice]

LIKE I SAID BEFORE YOU HAVE A GREAT TALENT FOR BRINGING A GREAT MIND TO WORK...YOU BROUGHT THIS POEM TOGETHER LIKE IT WAS NOTHING JUST LIKE MANY OTHERS I HAVE BEEN READING OF YOURS....THE MORE AND MORE I READ YOUR WORK THE BETTER IT SEEMS TO GET EACH TIME I WILL ALWAYS GIVE YOU A HIGH RATING CAUSE I NEVER SEE ANY FLAWS WITHIN YOUR HEART OF WRITING...GOD BLESS

[JC]

"The devil is in the details"... and so, he is here.

The plight of man, always torn between what he desires and what God desires for him.

Great read, and thanks for making me think.

JC

[Celtic Cat]

OH have no fear. Just ignore the devil's foolish words and keep talking to God, the wizard of all wizards!! And, um, careful what you eat before bed!! ; )
I'm sure Carl Jung would have much more to say about this dream than I....
Interesting write!

[Jenny Davis]

Oh!! Very cool piece, Dale, it really makes the reader think...me like that :-)

[TL Boehm]

for it's succinctness this definitley plants a thought in the pysche. Nicely done. ALmost a 'warning' of a poem.

[Dezaraye]

Cryptic is his words ... is/are

This is a cryptic piece. It made me shudder.

[Carrie Montgomery]

full of images that leap out at you. Both the light and the dark are represented, which is true for life.
great job.