Echoes

  

Echoes of your lying words

Still beat on my eardrums

Withering away the seems

Till I fall deaf to love’s call.

 

Echoes of the roaring pain

Vibrate off the walls of my heart

Causing cracks along the chambers

Detaching my veins from the living.

 

Echoes of my future crumbling

Traps my feelings in darkness

With no real hope of escape

Taking my last breath of hope.

 

Echoes of faith descend from the clouds

Upon the sunrays of a new day

Standing before me is an angel

That makes heaven not so far away.

 

She’s the prayer I didn’t ask for

She’s the miracle I longed for

She’s the complete opposite of you

She’s the wings wrapped around my heart

She’ everything I could have asked for

And so much more.

 

She’s my echo of true love rising above every mountain.

Reviews

[J. James Reider]

hehe, you know? I was married for five years which doesn't seem like a long time, but... Every girl I dated for two years was just like my ex wife. Whether she looked like her or acted like her, there were always similarities...

Enough about me... lol Your poem doesn't really rhyme, but it reads like it does which takes talent to pull off. You probably didn't realize you were doing it, as we seldom do, but the talent demands to have a voice one way or another. Terrific job on this piece and it is an enjoyable read (:

[WV_Poetess]

Your words are beautiful and I'm glad you found the angel you needed to move past the pain. I think we cherish real love so much more after we've been hurt by someone else. Great writing!

[T]

You stirred my emotions real good with wonderfully written poem, Dale! You penned the pain, the hurt and found happiness. I love happy endings! Awesome writing as always, cowboy! hugs

[DeeDee Kaulitz]

This was a beautiful poem despite it seeming to be about a painful subject.

[KAREN BROWN]

THANK YOU FOR SHARING THIS WITH ME I FELT THE PAIN IN YOUR WORDS.I BELIEVE THE LORD IS ALWAYS WITH US TO GUIDE US THROUGH HOPELESSNESS AND PAIN. YOU WROTE THIS VERY WELL KEEP DOING A GOOD JOB.

KAREN

[Blackbirdsong]

I love how you build this poem from down and deeply depressed to joyous and ultimately blessed, which of course you have been...finally. Sometimes a blessing is just around the corner when bad things happen. That's my hope for everyone whose gone through something like this. I'm so happy that it worked out for you, Dale. You describe all that you've been through so wonderfully here. It's impossible to read this and not shed a tear or two by the end.

Great job :)

[M Bacchus]

I love how you take us from, you being broken with despair to almost hopelessness and end with a breath of fresh air with faith and a new reason to go on. Beautiful written piece.
Michael

[Wildfleour]

Well, thank goodness for true love!

[Mysty Rayn]

The ending was not expected. This is great. I'm so glad you gave it this title and write this.

[emmajoy]

This is a lovely expression of the lowest of lows and the highest of highs and said in a very fine poetric style.

'Echoes of faith descend from the clouds
Upon the sunrays of a new day
Standing before me is an angel
That makes heaven not so far away.

She's the prayer I didn't ask for
She's the miracle I longed for
She's the complete opposite of you
She's the wings wrapped around my heart
She' everything I could have asked for
And so much more.

She's my echo of true love rising above every mountain'

That says it all, pray every man has a woman like that in his life.