Echoes

  

Echoes of your lying words

Still beat on my eardrums

Withering away the seems

Till I fall deaf to love’s call.

 

Echoes of the roaring pain

Vibrate off the walls of my heart

Causing cracks along the chambers

Detaching my veins from the living.

 

Echoes of my future crumbling

Traps my feelings in darkness

With no real hope of escape

Taking my last breath of hope.

 

Echoes of faith descend from the clouds

Upon the sunrays of a new day

Standing before me is an angel

That makes heaven not so far away.

 

She’s the prayer I didn’t ask for

She’s the miracle I longed for

She’s the complete opposite of you

She’s the wings wrapped around my heart

She’ everything I could have asked for

And so much more.

 

She’s my echo of true love rising above every mountain.

Reviews

[J. James Reider]

hehe, you know? I was married for five years which doesn't seem like a long time, but... Every girl I dated for two years was just like my ex wife. Whether she looked like her or acted like her, there were always similarities...

Enough about me... lol Your poem doesn't really rhyme, but it reads like it does which takes talent to pull off. You probably didn't realize you were doing it, as we seldom do, but the talent demands to have a voice one way or another. Terrific job on this piece and it is an enjoyable read (:

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

i love your last line .. the poem speaks of heartache , can almost taste it in my mouth, a bitterness... quickly it is replaced with sweetness and real love.. very good work and choice of words to convey your feelings, from sadness to joy, perfect title.

Chloe
xoxo

[Gandré]

hello Dale,
this is such a great composition.. I enjoyed your wonderful poetical style. "Echoes of faith descend from the clouds

Upon the sunrays of a new day

Standing before me is an angel

That makes heaven not so far away." ----------those were my favorite lines. bravo !!

[T]

The pain of a past hurt can reside in us for a long time. Hopefully what we learn is to appreciate then a gift when it is found, such as your new love. Well written.

[Carrie Montgomery]

the repetition so fits the title of the poem and ties everything together nicely. I like that it ended on a positive and hopeful note. I cannot pick any particular line or stanza, as they are all so powerful and have so much meaning to me.

[MistyJRose]

Love it man, you definitely put all your heart and soul into it. the only thing in saw as in the first stanza about third line down you have "seem" instead of "seams" just thought i let ya know. Didnt take away from the feel of the poem though. you did an awesome job on it. :) this definitely goes in my favorites

[O!]

Am so glad that u have that someone in ur life... :-)

And I like how real u are in this poem.....it isnt rare of us to think of past relationships gone bad and compare them with what we now have which truly make us happy....

:-)

x,
O!

[Windy]

Wow! You had me about in tears and very sad then suddenly the world was bright again and I was smiling. A truly well written poem. Your descriptiveness was so deep and heatfelt, from the saddest parts to the joyfull ending. I love that you have a happy ending "She's my echo of true love rising above every mountain" how very beautiful. Well done my friend, sometimes the very "prayers" we don't ask for ARE the exact "Miracles" we end up with. Congratulations all around. Great..... ;)

[Brianna Brie]

Beautifully written. She comes out of the echoes of faith brought forth from the clouds. This inspires one to not give up. Your creativity is showing.

[Jenny Davis]

wow Wow WOW! This is so powerful...it seems to close one book and open another! I felt the pain of the past and LOVED the happiness of the present...Rock on cowboy! :)