Echoes

  

Echoes of your lying words

Still beat on my eardrums

Withering away the seems

Till I fall deaf to love’s call.

 

Echoes of the roaring pain

Vibrate off the walls of my heart

Causing cracks along the chambers

Detaching my veins from the living.

 

Echoes of my future crumbling

Traps my feelings in darkness

With no real hope of escape

Taking my last breath of hope.

 

Echoes of faith descend from the clouds

Upon the sunrays of a new day

Standing before me is an angel

That makes heaven not so far away.

 

She’s the prayer I didn’t ask for

She’s the miracle I longed for

She’s the complete opposite of you

She’s the wings wrapped around my heart

She’ everything I could have asked for

And so much more.

 

She’s my echo of true love rising above every mountain.

Reviews

[J. James Reider]

hehe, you know? I was married for five years which doesn't seem like a long time, but... Every girl I dated for two years was just like my ex wife. Whether she looked like her or acted like her, there were always similarities...

Enough about me... lol Your poem doesn't really rhyme, but it reads like it does which takes talent to pull off. You probably didn't realize you were doing it, as we seldom do, but the talent demands to have a voice one way or another. Terrific job on this piece and it is an enjoyable read (:

[Traces]

A song for sure, and every man/ woman here can relate in some small way if only in part to this poem. Blessings, Holly

[Winter McPherson]

Such a turn around in this poem. I thought the first few lines were awesome:
Echoes of your lying words

Still beat on my eardrums

Withering away the seems

Till I fall deaf to love's call.

The imagery of the seams of your eardrums withering away from her lies rendering you deaf to love's call was really good. (It's "seams" - not "seems" FYI)

Such a depression at the beginning then you soar with a new hope and love.
Nice write!

[Belinda Rice]

I REALLY LOVED THIS POEM IT WAS YET SAD BUT THE FULL OF HAPPYNESS THIS IS ONE OF YOUR MOST FINE GREAT PEICES OF WORK AND I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT GRETA JOB, YOU HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS AND YOU KNOW HOW TO REALLY PUT THINGS TOGETHER PERFECTLY...LOVED IT KOODOS MY FRIEND.

[JC]

"But the greatest of these, is love.

And when we least expect it, love is there, the greatest of all human emotions.

Well written, excellant flow and use of imagery.

Thank you for the invite.

JC

[ape domenigoni]

I love the way it flows, truly beautiful poem. Amazing talent :)

[bluessadmood]

this is so wonderful ,the words are so astounding,it goes from despair to a great blessing uncalled for as you say,i loved these words...
She's the prayer I didn't ask for
She's the miracle I longed for
She's the complete opposite of you
She's the wings wrapped around my heart
She' everything I could have asked for
very nice words really full of love ,i really liked this

[Jet Lag]

LOVE THE REPEATING LINES "ECHOES OF..."

MY FAVORITE LINES
Echoes of your lying words
Still beat on my eardrums
Withering away the seems
Till I fall deaf to love's call.

Echoes of my future crumbling

She's the prayer I didn't ask for
She's the miracle I longed for
She's the complete opposite of you

GREAT POEM AND I WISH YOU ALL HAPPINESS!

[Angelic Darkness]

This is beautiful, vibrant. Sometimes we find true love when we
least expect it. AD

[emz]

Great creshendo.... it read like a song, i loved the hurt and pessimism slowly rising and growing into hope and optimism... ( My spelling is not great i hope yo realise haha ).... Another wonderful piece of work from you my friend.

x

[DarkAngelWriter]