I wish I had read this before I made some of the choices I made... Of course it took a wet road, 3 beers and an oak tree to wake me up. That commercial is very true: "Buzzed driving is drunk driving." I was lucky that the only thing that was killed was my buzz and my wallet. I didn't even get a DUI; the breathalyzer came back below the limit, but I know the alcohol caused the accident.
The way you put it into verse was fantastic. It imparts an awesome message and if it is remembered by one person who chooses to call a cab instead of chancing it, then this poem will serve its purpose nobly. Wonderful job (:
Well written clear, message and style of writing. This kid 17 years old killed a couple last week, the couples' car was unreconizable. The kid not hardly a scratch, when told that the couple died, he said man I was fucked up, I was smoking weed and took some prescription drug, (can't remember which). He asked how was his car. He had no interest or remorse about the couple he killed. Sad.
I like the comparison in the two first stanzas: guzzle guzzle, gasoline and guzzle guzzle, beer... Evidently the incompatibility of two liquids is known to everyone in theory!
But in practice they can make a lot of people's life a living hell or worse.
This is a wonderful piece, it starts out as if it is going to be some lightfooted children's rhyme and precisely this will make that people are going to read it!
I do not know if there is some 'route safety' organisation around where you live, but in case there is, you should send this to them, this could be used on a road sign to warn drivers!
A very good idea turned in a wonderful poem!
A wonderful message right here Dale, and a reminder that is needed. It's just not worth the chance when there are multitudes killed by drunk drivers every year. Thanks for posting this...
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
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