I wish I had read this before I made some of the choices I made... Of course it took a wet road, 3 beers and an oak tree to wake me up. That commercial is very true: "Buzzed driving is drunk driving." I was lucky that the only thing that was killed was my buzz and my wallet. I didn't even get a DUI; the breathalyzer came back below the limit, but I know the alcohol caused the accident.
The way you put it into verse was fantastic. It imparts an awesome message and if it is remembered by one person who chooses to call a cab instead of chancing it, then this poem will serve its purpose nobly. Wonderful job (:
GREAT POEM, GREAT MESSAGE! I am so glad you wrote this, Dale...You rock!
If just one person can benefit from this piece, you've done your job, excellent :)
You know, I've heard all kind of "lecturings" about drinking and driving, but you've made it far more interesting. I mean, the kids don't listen to anyone who speak about drinking, smoking, doing drugs, and so on, yet they went on and done them anyway. Why? Very simple, the lecturings weren't "entertainment" enough for them to listen and learn. Somehow, this piece you've created; It sure will affect the young readers for sure...
On the other hand, it's all still great tho and I'm pretty sure that the kids will be more than happy to listen to you...
BRAVO! A great poem and much needed subject matter to be brought out. As for the poem itself, I loved the fow and the ryhme and your words played like a fiddle. You wrote this to where anyone of any age could understand it and hopefully pay attention and learn the lesson before it's to late. I take a personal interestest in this subject matter as it has affected my family. The drunk driver was a 16 year old boy who had just gotten his license that very day...he ran his car up into a schoolyard at recess time and pinned my little neice against the brick wall of the school. Thank God she is alive and walking today but it could have had a much different ending! Thank you for writing about such and important subject and for a wonderfully written poem. Congrats My Friend. :)
I like it. It sends a good message to everyone. Now, If only I had a car....or was 21....I could heed the warning. Plus, it's not just about drinking and driving. I mean, yeah, thats part of it, but there are alot more vehicles that just cars that run on gasoline. There are motorcycles, atvs, jet skies, and a lot of others. So saying gasoline covers a vast range of stuff. More people will be able to relate with it. That's cool.
What an interesting poem it has a message and yet still a playful in its wording. Gasoline alone can be a dangerous liquid it all depends on who is behind the wheel.
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
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my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..