Next Prey-er

   

Time to worship again

Lead your flock to the depths of hell.

Here on your scared ground

Lying eyes and snakeskin bites

Are parts of the everyday service.

 

High upon your altar

Looking down on your flock

Each one suffering the consequences

From worshiping your

Cruel temptress preechings.

 

Using sex as false salvation

And deceit as Hail Marys

Then corroding their spirits

In your fountain of debauchery

Disguised as pure holy water.

 

So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.

 

So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

 

 

Reviews

[Belinda Rice]

Wow this is very good I really like this alot you were really stright down to the point and you made in justifyed, You wrote this so farely and true that people suffer from so manything that some times we dont know what to do...God is suposed to be our healer and our father to bring us salvation and peace.We are not suposed to have to take the devils hand that places bad thing on us as we try to live a stong life...We are tested that yet I know through god but he him said we shall not suffer but yet we do..We suffer from to many things proverty emotional pain phycial ,mental and through the illness that the devil places apon us all...right here is what got me
So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.



So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

cause I will not ever fall to the prayer of the devil or the ones who think that sacrifice the virgins is best for our sins its not God is the one who said if you confess on to me then I shall forgive those who telleth me.You again have written a great piece and I could not have put this toghter better then you have I will rate this one on the most high God lets people recieve the best of all rating when you speake the words of the truth..and here you did so perfectly..ty for being the first one to be able to read this God Bless you and I hope that you become the most greatest writer in the world and I truly mean that I hope that you publish your work and I hope I can have the first signed book....Lots of caring Belinda I also wrote another sex story I know its not the time to tell you this but I did if you would read it I am editing it now ....ty

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

very strong emotion in this piece... great write

[Windy]

Very good write. I love the "stress" you put on the evil wrong doings of the "Person" in charge of this circus. To many places like this are popping up here and there these days. Some people will believe anything I guess. Your wording in this piece is so strong and intense, I love it! (Glad to see you won't become his next PREY-ER.) good play on that word as well. Alot different then your other things I've read but that is not in any way a bad thing. I think this is an excellant write my friend. Congrats on a job, superbly done. ;)

[Carole]

This piece makes me think of satanic rituals. Catchy title...for that is exactly what the devil himself does: Preys on innocent victims and seeks to devour them. Well done, Dale.

[J. James Reider]

Well penned, very intense piece. It reminds me of a sort of rebellion against cults and such. That's why poetry is so great; everyone interprets a poem in their own way.

I really enjoyed reading this piece and will be sure to check back often to read more of your works (:

[Lestat's daughter]

I love it!

[Wildfleour]

alter - altar

Mary's - Marys

Nit-picking aside, this was a powerful piece (nice play on words) and very different for you.

[Brianna Brie]

Using sex as false salvation
And deceit as Hail Mary's
Then corroding their spirits
In your fountain of debauchery
Disguised as pure holy water.

What depth!! I wonder if you even now the magnitude of which you write. It is masterfully crafted to mean more than one thing to different readers. Almost as if it is written in riddle that we may know only in part. You are an amazing writer.

[Jenny Davis]

Very interesting......hee hee. I think you have a point here, Dale. There are some people so easily persuaded by a pair of legs that they almost become hypnotized much like some folks that get brain washed in cults. Your conviction in this piece is obvious...stay strong, my friend. As always, cool write :)

PS- I loved your play on words, Prayer=Prey-er LOL!

[Ladysue]

Wow Dale, this is a very strong and potent piece. Written very tightly and firmly. The last stanza grips the reader. Evocative piece my friend! Very well expressed!

[Angelic Darkness]

To me this says you don't believe in organized religion, and the
people that do are fake, disguised, and just as evil. This is a powerful
piece, and really brings attention to your words. AD