Next Prey-er

   

Time to worship again

Lead your flock to the depths of hell.

Here on your scared ground

Lying eyes and snakeskin bites

Are parts of the everyday service.

 

High upon your altar

Looking down on your flock

Each one suffering the consequences

From worshiping your

Cruel temptress preechings.

 

Using sex as false salvation

And deceit as Hail Marys

Then corroding their spirits

In your fountain of debauchery

Disguised as pure holy water.

 

So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.

 

So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

 

 

Reviews

[Belinda Rice]

Wow this is very good I really like this alot you were really stright down to the point and you made in justifyed, You wrote this so farely and true that people suffer from so manything that some times we dont know what to do...God is suposed to be our healer and our father to bring us salvation and peace.We are not suposed to have to take the devils hand that places bad thing on us as we try to live a stong life...We are tested that yet I know through god but he him said we shall not suffer but yet we do..We suffer from to many things proverty emotional pain phycial ,mental and through the illness that the devil places apon us all...right here is what got me
So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.



So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

cause I will not ever fall to the prayer of the devil or the ones who think that sacrifice the virgins is best for our sins its not God is the one who said if you confess on to me then I shall forgive those who telleth me.You again have written a great piece and I could not have put this toghter better then you have I will rate this one on the most high God lets people recieve the best of all rating when you speake the words of the truth..and here you did so perfectly..ty for being the first one to be able to read this God Bless you and I hope that you become the most greatest writer in the world and I truly mean that I hope that you publish your work and I hope I can have the first signed book....Lots of caring Belinda I also wrote another sex story I know its not the time to tell you this but I did if you would read it I am editing it now ....ty

[M Bacchus]

A good rant put into prose, your word choice is excellent, but I don't feel as though this is a peice spoken against religion, but rather targeted toward a female predator, I may be wrong, but that is how I read this piece, the format is great and this has an excelent flow to it.
Michael

[Anima Inspired]

Great play on the word "prayer"/"prey-er" . I like the biblical theme throughout (Hail Mary's, sacrifice, altar, etc.), and the way that it fits with the overall theme of the piece. There are those who "tempt" for thier own pleasure, sacrificing the needs and feelings of others, and being able to see that is the first step in protecting oneself. Great poem.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Wow. Not what I expected when I saw the title but I had to come see! I love the word-play, you really nailed it. It is time, it's always time, another great write! Wow.

xxoxx

[Jet Lag]

great format and clever use of the word preyer!

[O!]

Very creative...clever! :-)...well deserved feature.

typo: scared (sacred)


x,
O!

[MorganLyn]

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there are sooo many things I could say for this poem.. but the only words that can describe it are. WOW. PASSIONATE. UNBELIEVABLY POWERFUL.

I can hear your anger at people who prey on others... your strong emotions show very clearly

great write!

[emz]

This is a truly fabulous write... so true and emotional.

Well done Dale i love it

x

[Gandré]

Lead your flock to the depths of hell.

Here on your scared ground

Lying eyes and snakeskin bites----------Dale.... this is beautiful.... what a successful great poem. Those were my favorite lines. Cruel temptress...hmm she didn't do for pleasure..... hugs lara

[Norma J. Jessee]

This is a powerful write Dale, There are indeed many who are misleading and falsifying Gods word for their own profit. And there are many who are following and believing every word. The Bible tells us that such men are false apostles, deceitful workers, transforming themselves into apostles of Christ. And no wonder for Satan himself keeps transforming himself into an angel of light, It is therefore nothing great if his ministers also keep transforming themselves into ministers of righteousness. But their end shall be according to their works. 2 Corinthians 11: 13-15

Kudos to you my friend.

[Winter McPherson]

This has got to be one of my favorites of yours! The depth is so incredible....and you never lost it the whole way through. I see some are interpreting this as religious but I see it as a sexual temptress with those worshipping at her alter of lies and deceit. Excellent. I love the "Prey-er" play on words. You've out done yourself.