I have alot to say about this poem yet again another great poem of yours, you have the gift with the mind heart and the hand that writes your poems, This piece stuck out wonderfuly cause of just mainly this part
Heaven's tears fall
so compassionately down
a porcelain face carved
of beauty and grace.
These forces of nature alone
define divine innocents
but together create
an angel with a dirty face.
Danger lies in being alone
but the devil is a waken
when two make a pair
from lights and mirrors.
God holds a key for us in life and the Devil trys to make us ugly and hurtful and your passion in this poem alone show your grace and I know from all of your wrting that you have the gift of showing the true side of you and what brings out the inner part of your self and life,TY so much for sharing this with me I love it...Belinda
God Bless
this poem rolls with passion and love that flows with time, it is wild and unabled to be tamed, yet tomorrow you will tempt it's fate again. Nice write.
I still sense such pain.....truly an enormity of it. I like very much your images and metaphors. I find this to be quite succinct and to the point. However, I wonder if you are both writing about your pain and at the same time obscuring it. In some of my poetry I do this. Good write.
"The answers to pure wings
is found in the thickest part
of the rolling fog."
I have to agree that this part is by far the best! I speaks so much of the mysteries of the middlelands, the places inbetween where the spirits and secrets lay.
I loved the poem! It was deep and made the reader reflect on what it may mean to themselves.
I think that it could have ended with the fog. The last part threw it off for me. But that's just me. :)
You create pictures with phrases, touch on things in a subtle but very clear way :
'Danger lies in being alone / but the devil is a waken / when two make a pair / from lights and mirrors.'
The reader has to dig a little to discover what she/he thinks might be wrapped in the words. Consequently and maybe, we find differences according to how the mind thinks:
'The answers to pure wings / is found in the thickest part / of the rolling fog. / So seek and you shall find
what is written in stone / until the new day dawns.'
I have alot to say about this poem yet again another great poem of yours, you have the gift with the mind heart and the hand that writes your poems, This piece stuck out wonderfuly cause of just mainly this part
Heaven's tears fall
so compassionately down
a porcelain face carved
of beauty and grace.
These forces of nature alone
define divine innocents
but together create
an angel with a dirty face.
Danger lies in being alone
but the devil is a waken
when two make a pair
from lights and mirrors.
God holds a key for us in life and the Devil trys to make us ugly and hurtful and your passion in this poem alone show your grace and I know from all of your wrting that you have the gift of showing the true side of you and what brings out the inner part of your self and life,TY so much for sharing this with me I love it...Belinda
God Bless
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
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my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..