Is It Written In The Stars?

                                                                                                

 

Everything has become clear

As the midnight sky,

Every star is a piece of the puzzle

 

            Each one a glimmer into my

                        Past, present or future.

 

Before hidden in the clouds of uncertainty

And the bright lights of the cities pain and misery

Now they shine brightly for infinity to see.

 

They light the way through endless

Space of hopes and dreams.

 

Some even connect to make out

The real me for caring eyes to gaze upon.

 

In the end the stars may not have written my destiny

But with so many ablaze in my minds galaxy

The options are  as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed upon.

 

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Well said, I'd like you to consider revising your last sentence Dale, it is a fragment.
The options are as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed upon...
The options are as endless as the sky my eyes are fixed upon.......suggestion.
........as the sky I feast my eyes upon........suggestion.
Beautiful thoughts here.
Helen :-)

[Tina Kline]

This is very beautiful and very mysterious, just like the stars way out there are. I really like this one.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Nicely done, Dale. Truly loved this write. Beautiful piece.

[Fran Marie]

Everything has become clear

As the midnight sky,

Every star is a piece of the puzzle



Each one a glimmer into my

Past, present or future

This is so true I think there is so much that becomes clear as we gaze up to the midnight sky~

we just have to figure out some of the puzzle's pieces and make the right connection~

Wonderfully penned my friend~Fran Marie

[Gary H]

interesting this one. I like the metaphoric use of the clouds clouding your future, present, past. also I like the way you have intimated that the city lights provide a false light in the world of the stars - something that could be taken so much further.

most of all though I'm fascinated by how you have tied up the imagery with horoscopes and made the whole poem a lot more real.

[Christel Grady]

Perfect! That was just what I needed today. : )

[Winter McPherson]

I really liked this, especially the ending. They might not have written your destiny but they are as endless as your own options in life. So true. We make our own path. We make our own choices. Thanks for the reminder. :)

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

love these lines...
"Before hidden in the clouds of uncertainty
And the bright lights of the cities pain and misery
Now they shine brightly for infinity to see."

fantastic piece ...

[JC]

It harkens to "Man is his own destiny" and that if we look back we can put together the pieces that have lead us to where we are today and a glimpse of where we are going.

I love the symbolism that you have used here.

I have a couple of suggestions, one happens to agree with Miz. I think the last line could either read "as endless as the skies my eyes are fixed upon, or "endless as the sky I keep my eyes...."

I also had a question on " of the cities pain and misery" .. is to be more than one city or was it suppose to be possessive of a singular "city's". Just curious.

Kudos on a insightful write.

JC

[Dezaraye]

In the end the stars may not have written my destiny
But with so many ablaze in my minds galaxy
The options are as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed upon.

These are my favorite lines. I never believed that my destiny was already set ... I know that I make my own by the choices I make each and every day. Overwhelming, but wonderful to see how many paths I may take.