Forever Touching My Heart

 

A misty shadow appears

Through blue stained glass

While crystallized memories

As clear as dew on a rose petal

Moistens my cheek.

My lips form words

Longing to be spoken

But my breath fogs the mirror

Somehow my image isn’t the same.

Daydream images flash

Through my head

Of that yellow sundress

Floating in a field of daisies

And that child like smile

That brought the boy out of me.

Now as I lay these orchids at your feet

I can feel the feathers

From your wings touching my heart.

Author's Note

More than 20 years ago my live in girlfriend was struck and killed be a drunk driver on her way home from work. I was out of town with my band playing a show. She died in the hospital before I returned how. To this day the guilt and shame of not being there for her weighs on my heavy heart.

Reviews

[SM Davis]

Moistens my cheek
(I think you mean moisten your cheek...as you are talking about the plural ... memories) You know I had to. LOL

This is BEAUTIFUL!!! A clear introspection...and reaching that spot so few of us are willing to truly look at.

Floating in a field of daisies
And that child like smile
That brought the boy out of me.

You know me, there is nothing more pure or gentle than a field of daisies. I love them you know. LOL
Dale, this is wonderful...beautiful...and so touching. 100 daisies for you my dear friend.

[Larissa G.]

"As clear as dew on a rose pedal"
I recommend using a different flowers. Roses are a common item in poems, and that means it can be overused.

Otherwise I thought it flowed quite well and brought about a beautiful image that shared a wonderful story with us. Well done. :)

[lilain]

You truly have a gift, my friend. Between your succinct words in 'Chivalry' to your lovely, fluid, words of this poem, you've left me yearning for more from your writes.

"While crystallized memories
As clear as dew on a rose pedal..."

What a beautiful vision and you've created so much with precision.

Well done, well done!

[Wildfleour]

Cowboy - Just spectacular.

And that child like smile

That brought the boy out of me. -----GREAT LINES!!!!!!!!!!!

[Fran Marie]

An excellent piece so wonderfully expressed and well penned my friend~Fran Marie

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This was an excellent piece to be my first to review. It has a soft admiration for the oject of your affection, that makes me wish I was the one these words were dedicated to. So much feelings and visual discription, the yellow sundress floating in a field of daisy, I can see a cool summer twilight, a reflecting off the daisies and the sundress. Very nice.

[emz]

I think everyone has said everything... i agree with them all... a beautiful, touching write.

x

[Flow]

Nicely done Dale, it is a great memory captured in words and images. restropective pieces are always lovely reads and I enjoyed this one by you!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

You've done a breathtakingly beautiful write. I loved this piece, Dale. One of your best.

Stunning write.

[Dani California]

Dale, this is the best from you yet. Truly amazing and beautiful. Stunning in fact.

You amaze me...

[Winter McPherson]

This is so beautiful! I love the last line especially, as well as the floating skirt in the daisies. Beautifully done!