Without A Word

Eye to eye

across the room

mysterious intentions

but captures my interest

all the same.

 

Hand to hand

we start to explore

dangerous curves

ignoring warning signs

“Slippery when wet”

 

Lip to lip

it gets more personal

tasting sweet bliss

the nectar tingles

running down my chin.

 

Breath to breath

it’s like CPR

yet we both drown

in the inescapable emotions

as the dam breaks

 

Body to body

we crash into each other

with uninhibited force

powerful enough

to stop a speeding bullet.

 

Heart to heart

mine explodes

watching you walk away

knowing for you

this was the only time.

 

Without a word

this night has now become

a blessing and a curse.

Reviews

[Dani California]

Heart to heart
mine explodes
watching you walk away
knowing for you
this was the only time

Although this is a sexy piece, my mind stuck on this part. It hurt.

You did a fantastic job with the passionate, sexy, lustful aspects of this write, however to me the only thing that really matters.... is the heart. Giving yourself fully to someone and then they're gone, taking a piece of you with them leaving behind an emptiness. Powerful!

Gosh, I hope I didn't go too far and make this a downer! LOL I think too damn much...

It's hot, it truly is. But even more so, it's sad.

Excellent work sweets :)

[XB]

ok wow a dream come true yet a nightmare at the same time. to have what you have always wanted then have it be a one night stand (so to speak) would not wish that on anyone. Awesome write my dear keep it up I look forward to more.

PEACE!!!!!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

oh i like this - beautifully written

[Natalie C]

Hey Dale this was sooooo brilliant.
Very descriptive and your imagery was a treat for the senses, as always. I have to say I personally loved;

Heart to heart
mine explodes
watching you walk away
knowing for you
this was the only time.

This piece flowed perfectly and the metaphors just helped with the whole feel of the poem, setting the scene from hot passionate love to the cold reality with which the speaker is left with at the end of the night.

[-!katie!-]

this is really really good :]

It flows nicely and I like the ending. It makes you think. Good job :]]
bravooo !

[Gandré]

this is a personal poem, but written in kind of distance to the act itself. Very intersting. Your motives make me think "I wanna be there". A good loving poem.

[Gary H]

Wonderful flow and great idea. Must admit I could never have written this without going from being suggestive to plain crude - would have started with tongue to tongue......

I can understand what Angelic Darkness means but I do think this poem should be read, enjoyed and not analysed greatly. I'm sure this is the way what you suggest would happen.

[Carrie Montgomery]

ouch!
"Heart to heart

mine explodes

watching you walk away

knowing for you

this was the only time.



Without a word

this night has now become

a blessing and a curse."

[Mariah]

yes, this night was a deffinately a curse for my part.
i love the comparison. i just love reading your work. !

[Kelly D. Burris]

Wow, the passion and intensity in this piece is so artfully conveyed. Wonderful job with imagery here. I like how you used the senses, except for the sound of speaking, to relay the passion that was being felt in this piece. The way the emotions contrast in this, boy what a ride.... :) I ditto a lot of what Dani wrote; give yourself fully...
and when you do and they stay, ........
Very nice write.

[Adel Eyes]

I liked the imagery
short and sweet leaves some
room for the reader to
fantisize about.
Thanks