I Said (I Didn't Say)

  

Verbal exchanges

 

draws us closer,

 

sometimes…

 

tears us apart.

 

 

Endless harmonies

 

sung of praises

 

touches our souls

 

deepest melody.

 

 

Days get clearer

 

nights less lonely

 

when solo pasts

 

become future duets.

 

 

Higher the climb

 

the deeper the hole,

 

hard for sunlight

 

to take hold.

 

 

When I said it

 

mind wonders

 

Freudian Slip? Not why you think…

 

 

It’s what I didn’t say

 

that dug this grave.

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

the last line actually sent a chill down my back - I write way more concisely than I speak - I speak a lot mind you lol - just don't get my point across as well as when I write. I always realize later the things I forgot to say and meant to - most times I can go back and rectify that - but - sometimes it can be too late. awesome job.

laura

[Stacey]

Thanks for the comment!
The ending to this is and the first stanza. Communication and lack of communication can often ruin relationships and you did a great job of explaining it.

[None]

Well said. Sometimes we don't know when to hold 'em and when to fold 'em. Life has it's mysteries to behold. All for a certain reason not seen, I am sure. Very thought provoking and well written!

[TL Boehm]

wow. Poignant. Interesting that the one thing writers do, is 'say' things, yet what is unsaid, is what is deadly in this case. Wonderful, haunting irony in this one.

[Belinda Rice]

wow man great write I came accross this and I thought I would take a look and this cought my eye for some reason.....this is how I ust to feel at times it werd that i came accross this one but i am glad that i did perfectly penned.....I hope to keep seeing more and i hope to keep coming in seeing more....Belinda

[Dani California]

Words. A powerful tool designed to fix, maintain or destroy. Funny thing about words though.... as mighty as they may be, they can never be as powerful as actions. They come close sometimes, real close. But actions seal or break the deal .... every time.

Great job as always!

[Larissa G.]

"nights less lonely
when solo pasts
become future duets."

This was my favorite part of the poem, definitely. :) It almost felt out of place, though. maybe I'm misreading it, but the rest of the poem seemed a bit darker than this, and it almost felt random to me dealing with that flow and theme. Like I said, I may be suffering from brain freeze right now. ^^ Not too sure.
It is a lovely work, it may just need some tuning.

[Lionel Braud]

The introduction gets us interested, makes us wonder where this is leading too, but I especially like the last two stanzas. It really solidifies this poem.

When I said it



mind wonders



Freudian Slip? Not why you think�





It's what I didn't say



that dug this grave.

[Jazmyne]

It's what I didn't say

that dug this grave.

the last line really stood out for me. this was a great write...i really liked reading this one. it really made things stand out...like the little things still should get reconized...love it...hehe!!

[-!katie!-]

"nights less lonely
when solo pasts
become future duets."

woah. I LOVE this.

amazing.

never ever stop writing.

this is really good.
This poem is almost vague, but in a way that makes you really think and relate it in your own way.
You're an amazing writer.
You made my heart do that little warm fuzzy thing. That doesn't happen too much. GOOD JOB!
wooo. go you.
haha. love this poem (: