Standing On The Edge Of Your Life

Distant wailing cries in the night

Break the silence of what you believe.

            Screaming…

                        Fading…

                                    Echoing…

 

Master or commander is your fate

As it barks orders you never thought possible.

            Attack…

                        Retreat…

                                    Fight on…           

 

Destiny has now become a ghost

Trapped among the ruins of infinity.

            Help me…

                        Break me…

                                    Trust me…

 

Fantasies of riding the wings of immortality

Have been clipped by an angel’s jealousy.

            Dare me…

                        Kill me…

                       

Enlightened souls with dark hearts

Align this path not paved with gold.

            Follow it…

                        Escape it…

           

The razor sharp blade taunts cold flesh

When you’re standing on the edge of your life.

 

                        TOTAL REALESE…

 

                        FREEDOM RINGS!!

 

 

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

It has a certain complexity to it. Many themes..internal struggle, fight or flight, freeedom/inprisonment, dark/light, infinity/mortality! Stand on the razor's edge. "Well darkness has a hunger that's insatiable/And lightness has a call that's hard to hear." Good stuff, Cowboy!

[Laura Sparkle]

wow. the beginning of it brought me to a wonderful dark field with a forgotten house... the thrill, the rush! I loved it till the last.. red, slippery... drop. :P

[Kara Emily Krantz]

intense. everyone else relaly said it all... this was very emotive, very powerful. i was definitely drawn into the feelings, the angst, the intensity

'When you're standing on the edge of your life."

for some reason that line really stood out to me.
great job my dear. i loved the format as well, it worked really well

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

OH MY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is simply fantastic - the writing is excellent -
love it!

[Robert Luna]

Damn will you stop seeking into my head and capturing my words. I told you if you were going to go playing around in my head at least leave a note and some cookies so I know you were there. LOL

I really love this new side to your writing feels personal and purposeful. I am grateful to share in this write nad to allow it to course into my own thoughts.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Jenny Davis]

Woot! This is all kinds of awesome, Dale....wow!
"Have been clipped by an angel's jealousy.

Dare me�

Kill me�".............Damn those are great lines :)

[Dani California]

Magnificent!! Oh I love this one my dear. I am adding to my favorites!

I've taken several meanings from this.... from the war within, temptation to the need to break free from our binding mortality.

Wow. Very well done!

[TL Boehm]

it speaks to that thing within us that begs to be free....that call....well done. I liked the set up of the poem on the page, adding to the falling effect....the standing on the edge effect...

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Powerful, wonderfully written piece. A favorite of yours. Nicely done.


Great Write.