Standing On The Edge Of Your Life

Distant wailing cries in the night

Break the silence of what you believe.

            Screaming…

                        Fading…

                                    Echoing…

 

Master or commander is your fate

As it barks orders you never thought possible.

            Attack…

                        Retreat…

                                    Fight on…           

 

Destiny has now become a ghost

Trapped among the ruins of infinity.

            Help me…

                        Break me…

                                    Trust me…

 

Fantasies of riding the wings of immortality

Have been clipped by an angel’s jealousy.

            Dare me…

                        Kill me…

                       

Enlightened souls with dark hearts

Align this path not paved with gold.

            Follow it…

                        Escape it…

           

The razor sharp blade taunts cold flesh

When you’re standing on the edge of your life.

 

                        TOTAL REALESE…

 

                        FREEDOM RINGS!!

 

 

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

It has a certain complexity to it. Many themes..internal struggle, fight or flight, freeedom/inprisonment, dark/light, infinity/mortality! Stand on the razor's edge. "Well darkness has a hunger that's insatiable/And lightness has a call that's hard to hear." Good stuff, Cowboy!

[Ruth]

And yet, freedom sings within too, beckoning us on, the blade can wait, along with the grave, too many battles to be won ;) xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is so true hon… we must fight the good fight on Earth till we are called upon to protect heaven.

[Kleio13]

" Break the silence of what you believe" - best line yet in this poem and yet another preaching

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Frieda P]

This is outstanding in all aspects Dale, it's delivery, presenting the some of the great mysteries and questions of life. The format adds depth to it's elegance too. Kudos!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much :)

[Frieda P]

ha I was expecting a little devil and all that jazz ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I just poted it. This poem is an older one.

[Frieda P]

hahaha are you watering it too, wanting for sun or what? lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

OMG, spell check where are you. Don't let Kimmer see that.

[Frieda P]

ha shhhh i'll never tell, but you know her, she scopes out everything in sight!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is why I always feel like there is a pair of eyes on me :)

[Frieda P]

There are! ;-)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Jazz was here ............... xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Always glad when you stop by xx

[J. J. Nightingale]

:).............................. xx

[Circe]

this is unbelievably true... each verse seems to deal with big unaswerables.. but there is that voice which trails off to seek freedom in the unknown, leave behind the darkness.. where freedom rings, that's a great line, actually made my ears ring.. you have built great anticipation in this piece, stunning.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much for that stunning review. I always appreciate your views.

[AWickedMoon]

I greatly enjoyed this poem :) I love the format! (sorry im kind of lacking in skills of the comment department)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much,

[KAOlmsted]

Ooh, I love this one, although I have to admit I was singing the Divinyls in my head when I saw your title ;-) This is as close to perfection as it gets, Dale. This is a superior write, my friend. Thank you so much for dusting this one off for us.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow, that is quite a compliment, this is one of my favorites i wrote... never heard that song by the Divinyls... I think the only one I know it I Touch Myself, of coarse.

[KAOlmsted]

Naturally XD It's called Pleasure and Pain and it is one of my favorites; you should check it out some time. Yes, this is a really great piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the format of this...it is like standing on the edge of a flight of stairs, deciding whether to take the step...that step could be moving forward or it could be stepping off the top stair and falling into the abyss..

moving forward or ending it.

so many of us have stood at that edge before...it's scary there, and pivotal as to what we decide to do.

nice work, Cowboy!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much sir.

[AYVID N]

Exquisite dark poetry with a sinister touch!

Man is sometimes tempted to break the glass wall when every thing seems to go out of control and against him.

The following lines brought to mind an image of Lucifer (Satan) conspiring with death against humanity...
"Fantasies of riding the wings of immortality
Have been clipped by an angel’s jealousy" - this brought on a deeper theological meaning for me.

Superb!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much... You saw things others did not... I appreciate that... so glad you enjoyed it. That made my night.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome. Please keep writing lovely poetry!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

:)

[Kat Wildd]

I like it! You captured, perfectly, the struggle to experience life on our own terms. Well written.