I Will Bleed

I will bleed for those I love

taking a bullet or knife.

I will not bleed for just myself.

 

I will bleed for the poor

to enrich their lives.

I will not bleed to make you rich.

 

I will bleed for honor

if it is in question.

I will not bleed for foolish pride.

 

I will bleed for humanity

when it cries out.

I will not bleed to prove I’m human.

 

I will bleed for you

even if in return

your blood runs cold for me.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This is virtually an oath of allegiance, it displays unselfishness and loyalty in a very powerful yet straightforward way. Then, the reader reaches those final three lines and knows that what came before is leading up to the deep feelings of: 'I will bleed for you / even if in return / your blood runs cold for me'

It's a mix of sadness and strength. Thank you for sharing this post.

[Vatsayayana]

Hmmm... very dark. Poignant. Rich.

"I will bleed for you
Even if in return
Your blood runs cold for me"

Beautifully scripted. I fully admit I'm more drawn to the dark, the macabre. There's always more depth, more intensity. We're all flesh and bone at the core, so for me, the blood description is apt. It explains who we are, what we are and how we think. I love the emotions you've mixed in with this. Very powerful hon. It's interesting to see this side of you.
Brava!

[DarkAngelWriter]

Wow.
Creepy.
Good creepy. =)
I really really love this.

I Will Bleed as well...

[Mariah]

bone chilling,
but in a good way.
i loved it. :)

I will bleed for you

even if in return

your blood runs cold for me.

favorite part.

[Blue Bard]

I found the statement: I will bleed for humanity/when it cries out/I will not bleed to prove I'm human..., to be very enigmatic. You've taken a classic Shakespearean idea, "If you cut me, do I not bleed," and turned humanity toward the best in us, which is compassion. Well said.

[[untitled]]

Very powerful piece of writing in so few words. The flow was good. I liked what you had to say in this poem!

[Floating on the feather..]

Lines, which can awaken the humanity and patriotism in every soul....
Very evocative....

Poignant to the core...Great write.

Bravo !!!

[Gary H]

Sounds very forceful and definitive. This is what you will do - 'I will bleed' - no matter the consequences of others actions. Thats a well written statement.

[[untitled]]

I like this... a man willing to bleed for what they believe in..

Kudos****

Good write! a little blood always tasted pretty good to me ;)

[Mell]

Wow, I really like this. Very touching and selfless.

[Legion]

Wow dude! That was a great message. Bravo!