Grave Yard Wish

Inspired by the Heroine Diaries by Nikki Sixx- reposted

 Floating high above it all

I recognize everything,

Trying to figure out

What it all means.

The scene is chaotic

Distorted by flashing lights,

Tears wash the concrete

While screams cut the night.

A ghostly figure is motionless

But the spirit is still in hiding.

It’s all too familiar

Like something I wished,

Such a long time coming

But by no means shocking.

Such a bittersweet release,

A prayer finally answered

But thoughts start to betray,

To love myself now is futile

Cause time has no replay,

It’s now set in stone.

The light is so very bright

The closer to heaven I get,

A place I never thought I belong

Nor deserved to ever be.

Blurred my vision has become

As I awaken in my bed

Now I clearly see

What heaven means to me,

The sun peeking through the shades

And the birds singing away.

Millions of times I’ve woken

To a brand new day

Still the first time in my life

I’m glad to be alive.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Rocknrollcowboy,
Your poem, "Grave yard wish" is like a story with context and a positive ending. It even has a moral to it.
You are a witness to a death scene, "floating above,,lights flashing" to tears on pavement."
Death has visited; "figure motionless..spirit in hiding."
Acceptance in the dream of what is come. Death is the door to heaven, to peace and rest from the pain of life?, "Something I wished..long time coming.. no means shocking." then, "Prayer finally answered, bittersweet release."
Then the sobering reality of no going back. This was amazing! "Love myself is futile, time has no replay, now set in stone."
This is also incredible! "Light so very bright, closer to heaven I get, a place I thought I'd never get, never thought I'd belong nor deserved to ever be."
How thankful to just awake to a new day; and you surly have! "Blurred vision..as I awaken in my bed. Now I clearly see what heaven means to me."
Full wakefulness and continued life sings. "Sun peeking through the shades, and the birds singing away. Brand new day..Still the first time in my life I'm glad to be alive."
What inspiration I've received herein. This poem is a real thinker.
Bless you today and tomorrow.
Kathy

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for a wonderful and in-depth review, the poem was inspired by what I read about when Nikki Sixx overdosed and his out of body experience.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Rocknrollcowboy,
This poem of yours showed such amplified detail. I was so taken by it's real life message. Life is real and lovely. Death is unseen but oh so real.
You did an amazing job. It was my pleasure to enter into this story of yours!
blessings sir,
Kathy

[Lizanne]

You got it!!! Now get to work and flaunt that talent. You have the talent to write a book. By the way, just how many college degrees do you have? You depict all this so well.

[Anastasia Starlena]

Wow this was an amazing piece. I am going to have to read that book now. This poem was very soulful.

[Helen Woodward]

Stunning Dale!! Your wording flows like honey dripping off the tongue. An impressive insight into the spiritual realm, not an easy thing to do my friend, but you obviously felt this with controlled depth because if it were out of control it would have ended up like the frenzy of a galloping horse heading for a burning barn. You would give theologians a run for their money and that is pleasing to me!!
I would break it out of the bulk, by using 2 key lines here and there to place emphasis...but it really doesn't need a thing.
Deep...very deep, but not too much so it can't be understood.
Loved it.
Helen :-)

[LonelySoul]

chilling ...very chilling in my spine...good work!

[SM Davis]

Like something I wished,
Such a long time coming
But by no means shocking.
Such a bittersweet release,
A prayer finally answered
But thoughts start to betray,
To love myself now is futile

A fantastically honest write...the character ruling this piece is refreshingly distressed. By that I mean there is no attempt to hide the emotions that are looking back at them. Yes, a very good write Dale.

[Ladysue]

I really like this. Very well expressed, Dale. I enjoyed the read!! Great piece of writing!

[Jenny Davis]

I like this! It gives hope because as long as we are living there is still a chance to mend things ;)
Great stuff, love the in-depth imagery :-)

[Seriana]

This is a lovely piece Dale. I really like seeing this side of your poetry, it's refreshing and pure. Quite a charming piece, my dear. :)

[robin]

This part:
Millions of times I've woken
To a brand new day
Still the first time in my life
I'm glad to be alive.

Reminds me of both Bukowski And TS Eliot. Well done!

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written. Wonderfully penned. Great job.