Breaking In Your Religion

It is what it is.

A call of the wild

Never sounded so

Forbiddingly sweet

Till you whispered

In my ear,

“Please take me now”.

 

So on a warm summers night

With only the moon

To witness us

Dripping in sin,

We baptize our lust

As your holy reputation

Becomes the martyr

Nailed to my cross.

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Bad, very bad. :)
A good poem though.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Bad is one of my favorite compliments, thank you.

[Matching Socks]

I'm so surprised! (Ok, no I'm not). :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Oh, my... what a metaphor you have given us here, Dale! Certainly transcendent, which Religion should be so fortunate to achieve!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thant so much Rita… I try to be creative without being tacky.

[Norah]

I really enjoyed reading this poem, very interesting!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Norah]

My pleasure!

[TL Boehm]

We baptize our lust
As your holy reputation
Becomes the martyr
Nailed to my cross.

stellar write here Dale!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much Tammy :))

[PloughBoy]

Ah, dipping into the virginal pool, are we, Cowboy? It wouldn't be the first time, nor will it be the last. There are always those out there more than willing to deflower the purest of pure. However, it does take two to tango, despite what many religious pundits might think.

Very...controversial, I would think, but also quite creative.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much… I don't mind being controversial as long as I am being myself.

[PloughBoy]

You're welcome, and I love being controversial because then, I am being myself.:}

[Sheila Kline]

Hummm......you're counting on me to give you reason to lift your spirit to the heavens........what can I say???? I agree with Frieda - but I know you're not Catholic so The Hail Marys won't do it, how about "On bended knee, I come to you my precious Lord with all my imperfections, and say I am Yours in spite of my transgressions"?
He knows we are human..............LOL

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are right I am a methodist… but still enjoy my fun :) Thanks Sheila.

[Sheila Kline]

And I know how much you love fun and life.........He loves us no matter what we do, and that is why He is so wonderful!!!! He gave you the creativity you have.

[DIVYA]

This is scandalous! Sacrilegious! And I absolutely LOVE it!!!!

You naughty Cowboy!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks so much sweetie,,, what can I say, I have to stir the pot sometimes otherwise I wouldn't be me.

[DIVYA]

You stirred it in all the right places with this one ;)
You are welcome Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow your really flatter me xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like Frieda, i was quite surprised, but pleased where this went.

another really excellent metaphor...
my favorite from you.
jacob

the last stanza nailed me to the same cross.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you Jacob, coming from the master of the metaphor that is a great compliment.

[Frieda P]

NOT what I was expecting....you've been a bad boy cowboy. Say three hail Mary's and call it a night. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I think it will take more then some Hail Marys to save me :))

[Frieda P]

I was being kind....sheesh! ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh sorry, I didn't recognize kindness from you :)))

Oh and you say I've been a bad boy like that is a bad thing.

[Frieda P]

Ha I figured you wouldn't recognize me without my sarcasm, I was going to say lol