I've Been Shot Straight Through My Verse

There are holes in my verses

Because my writing journal

Is not bullet proof,

It is bound with leather

But soft to the touch.

 

There are holes in my verses

But that is okay with me,

I want the world to see

Through my words and know

I bleed every emotion I write.

 

There are holes in my verses

And that is how I want it to be,

For it will give the woman

Of my dreams and beyond

A reason to complete me.

 

There are holes in my verses,

So I believe that is the way

That God has divined it to be,

For it is his method of teaching me

The art of being humble.

Reviews

[s y e]

Love the metaphors here, Dale. You really do now how to write a good poem and make it pack a punch. This was amazingly well written with so many good lines! Ha.

[Coyote Poetry]

"For it is his method of teaching me
The art of being humble."
I agree. God does make us know. We need help sometimes. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you for reading and your kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is my pleasure.

[Muse]

You are learning the art of imperfection my friend. It's okay to be average, it okay to be 2nd best. Humility adds grace and wisdom. We were never meant to feel self-fulfilled without the love of others. You may be the chocolate cake, but there's a whip cream out there, and I promise you....when you put the two together, it taste even better! Sorry, I'm thinking about food, I guess I'm still hungry. lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you Muse, you are always so enlightening in your reviews.

[Jennie Baron]

Dale, it seems our poetry expresses similar ideas about the nature of love. I've gotten into discussions lately about expecting a lover to "complete" you. While I hesitate to say that one should do that, other people seem to imply that love is falling into a codependent trap. Or that it is the coming together of two souls that are already "complete." Like you have to be so freaking self-actualized before you can love someone. I say if that's what one expects one will wait forever!

Yeah, maybe my poems are sort of naive. But to paraphrase my songwriter character, Christopher, whom I credit for "Livin' the Dream," if you give a little of yourself, you can get so much in return. I think you have more the right idea, mon ami.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for sharing you wonderful insight, I believe true love people can be as one and themselves… we should be one another's support but not a crutch. Thank you again.

[Jennie Baron]

Amen, brother.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"shot through the verse, and you're to blame, you give poetry...well you give poetry a 'good name' Dale...because you really have such depth and variety to your writing. always the unexpected.

[Matching Socks]

For the record... I love this review.
And it's NOT because I LOVE Bon Jovi.
:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow thank you Jacob, first off I love Bon Jovi and that song but also I appreciate the great compliment coming from such a great writer as yourself.

[Matching Socks]

There are holes in my verses
And that is how I want it to be,
For it will give the woman
Of my dreams and beyond
A reason to complete me.

.......................................................................................best verse ever...........................................................................................................speechless.........................................so romantic.................................there are holes in my review........................cuz I'm not sure what to say..................................I bet you take her...................breath away....................................needless to say...............................I love this poem....................................xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much, that had to be one of the most creatively sweet reviews I have ever had.

[Matching Socks]

Fist pump?

[Matching Socks]

Ummm, I meant bump!!!! Lol!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Wow, Cowboy I loved this... to be humble and yet know that your emotions and writing inspire is an amazing virtue to have. I really enjoyed this piece!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much, I always have a smile when I know you like my words.

[Marie]

I could say something about writing holy verses, but I won't. I could also ask if you are wholly inspired, but I won't do that either.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you very much.