This is really nice, Dale! I like "Her curves are so sexy/Arousal comes at the speed of light,/It still doesn’t compare to how fast/Her mind gets mine intellectually racing." That's a brilliant stanza.
Anyway, you might want to add commas on this the line "I on the other hand" so that it will be "I, on the other hand,".
I am thinking the speaker is in love with someone here on this site. I might be wrong. ;)
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10 Years Ago
Thank you, I love that stanza too, and thanks for the advice on punctuation.
You may be wrong.. read moreThank you, I love that stanza too, and thanks for the advice on punctuation.
You may be wrong or you may be right on that last bit :)
10 Years Ago
You tickled my funny bone, Dale. :P
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Did I know and I don't even have a feather, LOL
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How come? You're a chicken. You are a bunch of feathers. :P
Bluejay is better, I agree. But I won't give you the satisfaction of being metaphored as that. Let's.. read moreBluejay is better, I agree. But I won't give you the satisfaction of being metaphored as that. Let's stick to the original. You stay as a chicken. :P
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Fine *hangs head and sulks* I guess I will have to stay away from Foster Farms, LOL
I have met so many men and women like this here on the WC. We see the minds of our fellow writers more easily than the people in their real life situations because we do not have the distraction of everyday life and the physical world to get in the way of see into their hearts...
There is a simplicity to it all that is very beautiful in conveying a complexity beyond the typical interactions in life.
I feel much like this with my friends here.
Thank you for sharing this thought Dale. You have penned this concept very well.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings on the subject.
10 Years Ago
You covered the topic well Dale. Funny, I wrote a review to Emma Joy about the gentle simplicity of.. read moreYou covered the topic well Dale. Funny, I wrote a review to Emma Joy about the gentle simplicity of her writing. Naturally, I was not talking about anything "simple", but rather the opposite. Actually I was feeling very much what you penned here. Interesting how the same feelings can generate almost opposite vocabulary to convey the similarity of thought.
Anyhow... I am probably boring you by now. ha.
Have a blessed day friend.
I absolutely love poems about a cherished woman, the views of a woman that are rendered so sweetly, impressions of who they are to you, how they have "made you want to be a better person" , how they shape that admiration, I've always been reaallly bad at writing love songs, but this could be a song :) It's a beauty!
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10 Years Ago
Thank you very much for the feedback, I love the stimulation when another challenges my thoughts, ev.. read moreThank you very much for the feedback, I love the stimulation when another challenges my thoughts, even if I don't agree with them. I once said "A man who doesn't appreciate the heart of a good woman is the world's biggest fool" And there are a lot of fools out there but I am not one of them.
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There are worse things than being a fool for love, but not many much worse than being fool by love. .. read moreThere are worse things than being a fool for love, but not many much worse than being fool by love. Its my pleasure to read you R&R.
---How romantic those words are, Mr. Cowboy. Those words echo in the four corners of this room. You are admiring someone so beautiful and intelligent in your eyes. I'm happy to see someone like the speaker of this poem.
However, in reality, a loving heart always see beautiful things. That's why when a person is in love, he is inspired every moment he/she sees or talks with the one being loved.
So splendid. Keep it up!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
You are very right about that… thank you so much for your input.
"Those who only judge
The cover
Are missing out on the heart-warning,
Intelligent story inside."
Only a very small percentage of the most caring, courageous and self-less feel the need to do this. To be appreciated and valued for who you are inside irrespective of how you look from outside is becoming an increasingly rare thing nowadays.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Well you can blame the media for making so many shallow and mind numbing to what is important. Than.. read moreWell you can blame the media for making so many shallow and mind numbing to what is important. Thank you sweetie.
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
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my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..