The Grim Reaper In My Shoes

The effects of the graveyard shift on a positive mind.

 

The lights are on

so I cannot see outside.

Darkness all around

but the reflections on the windows

leave me consumed within myself.

My image on all sides of me,

I have become my own worst fear…

         Claustrophobia.

Asphyxiation without strangulation

leaves no fingerprints

to identify the dying soul’s

destination in the afterlife.

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

So few words and so much said.

[Renée]

What is it about the dark that creeps us out? You defiantly captured that feeling catching glimpses in the window that after a heart pounding minute turns out to be you..then to venture outside...sounds like it really affected you and in a creative way !

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I don't know but it was certainly a depressing spot to be in, thank you.

[Renée]

Sounds like it .. glad you not in that spot anymore

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Me too... back to my normal, hahaha

[Renée]

now i'm worried q ;

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

hehehe as you should be ;)

[Angi]

This is a wonderful writing, Cowboy. The graveyard shift in a glassed in place like that would be stifling and creepy, too. Purging can be good at keeping us sane. Angi~

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Very creepy indeed, I started seeing things that weren't there. Thank you.

[L.Edward]

Darkness tinged with light at the end. "Destination in the after life." Death seems less scary when you consider the afterlife.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for your thoughts.

[Rita L. Sev]

There is a reason it's called the "graveyard shift", and your poem illustrates that feeling of being confined in a glass coffin perfectly. Each time I read this piece, I felt my own walls closing in more... A testimony to your skill as a writer!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you very much... I like what I wrote, just hate how I was feeling and it came about. But writing is about a positive way to get our feelings out.

[Jack...]

This was so cool. I read this several times and each time the picture became clearer. I like how this felt, even though it was quite dark and sinister. I saw the overhead lighting creating shadows in the corners and the reflections on the chalkboard windows. Very visual are your words. I liked this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks, scary part was those were my thoughts and I have never been like that before I never want to be again.

[David Scott]

Reading your description gave me a flash back... I used to work a psych ward twelve hour nights... around four in the morning things get mighty weird in the groggy halls of disquieted stillness.
Great thought capture here. I really felt the issue at hand reaching out with a boney grasp to twist the mind.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you, glad you can identify with it, been through a lot in my life and nothing has ever effected me like that did.

[SyberRose]

Your body clock is probably all messed up all ready....enjoyed reading though...when my son comes to visit because he works night work he is walking around the house at night while everyone is sleeping ha..eating at different times too.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Certainly something I don't want to get use to, I like what i wrote just not what caused it.

[AYVID N]

This is truly disturbing.
"I have become my own worst fear" _ speaks of a subject so depressed. Scary. Just goes to show effects of irregular sleep timings. Glad you are going back to regular working hours.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes it is amazing the kind of effect it has. I could tell right away.
Thank you.

[Relic]

The night time always leaves us vulnerable to bad thoughts to begin with. Being in a car with the light on must be scary a hell when you have to be there. The dark outside seems to become darker and your all lit up. Nerve racking for sure. The end of the poem describes the emotional state perfectly for someone in that situation.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir, everything bout it starts making you feel depressed, especially not having anyone to talk to.

P.S. Looks like you need some gas.

[Relic]

Yeah, that's gotta be depressing for sure.
haha, yeah, I ran out of words. Welcome.