Dump The Ashes

A collab with a great poet, human being and friend. Liza V. Thank you so much for allowing me to work with you. A true honor.

 

A suspect a passageway to the furnace at the base of my temple is blocked, the core of me is frozen,

I have sheltered this blockage because I’m afraid that an open flame is not a temperature yet set, for my surroundings to benefit.

The icicles formed throughout the cycles of my behavior

numbing me from within.

I sense a falling, breaking and melting of senseless disconnections,

these sensations are burning away unnerving connections;

fumes line the walls of my brain.

My thoughts become so dark that at times I forget how to breathe,

ashes rise out of my chest, I gulp on seemingly nothing and choke on every breeze.

Devastating the complexity of my appetite to break down and through

suffocating on the lifeless reflections that mold from untried tears.

These veins feel like a muddy ashtray,

so much so that I can taste the dark residue on my tongue

triggering my reflexes to heave this toxicity.

Pleading for the wind to blow through and kiss spring into me,

begging my heart to speak.

I recognize a tide coming urging me to spread out to the sea

or become the Phoenix.

Obscurity creeps through my cardio halls,

I vow to transform the eternal through humanities canal.

A stream appears, I breathe steam and witness vessels gently pushing through my own resistance… I exhale a sigh of rebirth.

Author's Note

I got a call from my friend one day asking if I wanted to collar, said she had an idea that involved using smoke and ashes as metaphors... the interesting thing was I had already written six lines with the same concept two days before but hadn't completed it... After going back and forth adding and editing our words have combined to form this poem.

Reviews

[Blue Ivory]

It's so cool how you guys came up with this! This is an awesome poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, it is fun blending with others.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Wow!! That was an amazing heartfelt write.. I really enjoyed this one alot

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you.

[Alicia Schroeder]

no problem :D

[Dayran]

This may well bring an illustration to the fact we all start from a point of nerves, static impulses and magnetic poles. Its what we bring to it as relations and socialization that transforms that into a man.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is an excellent observation, thank you.

[Ashly Christen]

wow this is awesome i love this you did a great job!!!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much :)

[Renée]

Well Done to the both of you ! I love collabs you meld as one here..

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[KeelyJane]

Great collaboration of what appears to be two extremely talented writers. I enjoyed this very much.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much :)

[KAOlmsted]

Very dark and expressive...I like it. Really great collaboration.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much vacker :)

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure, älskling ;-)

[Frieda P]

Very affecting and powerful read. Kudos to you both.

Sounds like this should come with a warning too. ;-)

Nice ending, 'through my own resistance… I exhale a sigh of rebirth.....always leave on a high note. Touching read Dale. '

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, I had a very talented friend make me look good.

[Frieda P]

Nice of you to say, but I'm 100% sure you can hold your own dear. ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you for making me blush :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, red is my favorite color. ;-)

[lee von cleef]

You know I love thought ,movement,concepts,so this fits all criteria! I wounder if it is easier to critique two or one? Not knowing who wrote what I give the unknown accolade or electric prod to the other. The word "My" floats in "My "opinion too often.My mind set on ashes then I formed a mental picture of a god evaporating to absence.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you.

[lee von cleef]

So I will read it again with a layer of gin, then some Cush,and see how it goes,Seattle's best.

[Holly Mason]

thoughts shared put together wonderfully you both shine here
thank you for sharing

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.