Powdered Doughnuts

 

That sticky sweet powder

may give you a rush

but the sour fall

will shrink  your veins,

cutting off the source of good

that fills your heart.

If you are not yourself anymore

then your tombstone has been carved

for the grave you’ve been digging.

Talking through rotten teeth

only makes the lies stink more

for you are not only living on borrowed time

but stolen money as well.

It is fitting that you gave away your soul

for the condition it is in now it isn’t worth a dime.

But the soul is as resilient

as it is invisible,

so the damage can be repaired

if only you are willing to see

in the nick of time

that the thing you think sweetens your life

is really decaying it.

 

Author's Note

Surprise surprise, not really about powdered doughnuts.

Reviews

[Patrick]

astonishing piece of writing...very graphic...made me hungry for donuts/doughnuts though :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you.

[written in blood]

simulating from the first line, such a poetic phrase you have created here it's definitely "food" for thought!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Erotic Goddess]

Haha, love the author's note! This was bittersweet and perfectly cynical. Great write love.

xxoxx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much Goddess, always good to hear from you.

[writing mojo]

"for you are not only living on borrowed time but stolen money as well." WOW that line it self should be patented as a stand alone, I would love to see big Hummers and other gas guzzling beast with that phrase smacked on their in debt bummers....anyway, I love the piece and how you explain (sloth) and (over consumption) perfectly. It doesn't matter if this a poem about drugs, diabetes, or just addiction in general, you hit the mainline of all the negative traits perfectly...good stuff

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much for the review sir.

[KAOlmsted]

I see meth in this. Maybe I'm wrong, but the rotten teeth, the lies, the stolen money, it all smacks of meth to me. I knew a guy whose girlfriend was a meth head...she practically lived on sugar. Her teeth were a mess. If this is about drug abuse, it is an extremely well written piece. Wait. What am I saying. Even if it's not about drug abuse this is an extremely well written piece xD Two thumbs up.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are so correct vacker ... meth or cocaine, or any hard drug for that matter. Thank you very much.

[KAOlmsted]

That s**t is toxic...my pleasure. Always.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well don't get addicted, LOL

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

What a well strong piece of writing that has power to it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

You are welcome!

[Tree]

We become what we immerse ourselves in, good, or bad. Whether it's a drug, food, a woman, the outdoors, Or a slum. I've been thinking about that lately, how what we surround ourselves with Becomes us. So we do have some measure of control. Anyway I'm just going where your thought provoking poem has led me, sir. Thank you for the words ...

Diego

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

What we surround ourselves with becomes us... oh how true that is... and that is why I try to not be around negative people too much.

[Marie]

Well it COULD be about powdred doughnuts...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes it could depending on your perspective.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that this is more convincing than a government health message

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

LOL, thank you so much.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

good work, it is my pleasure

[AYVID N]

Some things rot outwardly and some things rot inwardly. The damage done by the first is reversible but the other one really condemns the soul to eternal death.

This is very well said and brilliant comparisons Dale!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much sweets :) You said it well.

[AYVID N]

With you, its easy :)