Overload

A weighty senryu

 

I gave it my all

But without your opinion

My thoughts tip the scale.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

To which side? I think this Senryu says more about you than any bared soul piece you have ever written or ever will. I think it says a lot about all of us, in fact. The heart and soul of this site is written right there in this Senryu, Dale. You've captured it. This should be the Cafe's motto, because this is it...absolutely it...in a nutshell. We all think one sided about our own work, be it we think we are absolutely brilliant or absolutely s**t...without another opinion, we continue to think that way. This is such an amazing piece. Damn, son...just amazing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow... You really saw the deepness of this piece... how grateful I am for that. Thank you so much.

[KAOlmsted]

Every now and then a piece just clicks in your head, you know? Always my pleasure, Dale.

[Frieda P]

Wow Dale, I was just having a conversation about this with a fellow writer/poet You hit this one out of the park with 14 little words. Kudos!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much... trots the bases giving high fives on the way in.

[Frieda P]

;-D My pleasure!

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Not sure I completely understand ... But I guess when heavy thoughts are shared, and help is rendered .. the load is lightened ... ?

Jazz

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Hey that is a great interpretation of the poem. In fact that was brilliant.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Oh you .. You r so kind .... :)........... And a damn fine Poet !!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I am just being truthful... and thank you Jazzy xx

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

YRW .. :)