Outlaws

Two senryus with similar ideas

 

The smallest of flames

can turn anything to ash.

Should we ban lighters?

 

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Love’s responsible

for destroying many lives;

still not illegal.

 

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

clever lines here, both parts of the poem very stimulating indeed....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Tree]

I like this. I really believe we will one day become a more healthier, emotionally mature society. When that day comes big brother will surely back off, we'll demand it. But still, we must keep in a mind that a true and morale society protects the weak, the defenseless... It has to. Good thoughts here, Dale. Good dialogue you've opened up

DP

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir... you speak some wise thoughts... it seems they keep trying to protect us but instead are really controlling us. One day it will change for the better. I hope I am around to see it.

[Tree]

Me to brother, me too

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

It will be historic.

[Baby Ricochet]

I like I like

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i love how you dealt with such a sensitive topic in a creative manner

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

You're welcome

[Circe]

it is a part of the natural process of life to watch things burn out... and regerminate.. although there seems to be a subtext about the influence of humans against the natural course of things.. the power to control fire... and the power to crush the heart's bloom... and the results of our influence is one drastic domino effect that is unfathomable and limitless.... not that it should be illegal, just the motivation of our actions are best coming from a place of purity... a really profound piece of writing, love it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much... these came about from a long time of making all these laws and rules to protect people more... in sports, on playgrounds... it is getting to the point we cannot do anything but sit there. It has become out of control.

[Gomer LePoet]

It's the price you pay for something that seems so sweet but is only a figment of the imagination R & R, until you get it right. then it is worth the investment of dura-flame logs

[Lily Mae]

It should be illegal.. damn.. lol..x

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why did i know you'd say that? xo

[Lily Mae]

You got me thinking so I wrote one.. so I got out of retirement for a moment lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is awesome... will check it out in a bit.

[MOON]

Clever write, ban humans I say!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is an idea, LOL

[Becky C Strukamp]

This raises excellent aweness in a unique and clever way. I like it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

because eventually love is to be controlled by us -supposedly- and till this extent no feeling or emotion is "legally" forbidden !
like it